[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for exosujulover[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]Ways a Nerd Can Seduce A Hot Kingka![/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Ways a Nerd Can Seduce A Hot Kingka!

Author: exosujulover

Main Characters: Luhan, Michelle/Mi-hyun (OC)

Genre: Romance, Schoollife

Status: On-going

Description of Story: A cute romance story about a nerdy girl from a foreign country who falls in love with Luhan, the jerky playboy. The storyline consists off how she slowly gains his attentions and the journey on how she does it! 

 

 

 

From Mirokochan: Sorry for not doing this earlier since I was busy with school and exams -_-''

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 4/5

Your title was okay not the best but it was alright. Yes your story is about a nerd who seduces a kingka but it didn't fully connect with the story. When I first saw the title, I was really excited to read the story as I thought it was maybe be something where a nerd takes revenge on a kingka and it will have steps in the story i.e:

"That little wort, I'll show you" said Nara clenching her fists

Step 1: Makeover

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Something like that, It'll make the story more interesting. Anyway after reading your story, I thought the title wasn't really suited. I can't really give you any titles that I think may suit it since it's not exactly my forte :P

 

Graphics: 10/10

Your poster, I LOVED. The only problem was that you putted it down in the description instead of at the very top where people can see it better. So maybe take that into consideration. Your poster has a little animation which I honestly haven't seen much , so good for you ^^. I did like how it was bright, girly and fun and how you had little dialog from the story instead of putting it in the foreword.

No background = fine to me ^^

 

Description and Foreword: 10/10

I loved it ^^ You put the background of the story in the description but not giving out to much. I honestly really did like it, I think it was a little long but that didn't affect me not liking it . In the foreword you put the characters that are in the story so that was fine, I read about all the characters up until- Nope I read everything XD I liked how you put their names in bold as it does attract the readers attention which will make them read it ^^

 

Characterization: 8/10

For starters you put the characters personality and how they are ect ect in the foreword which is perfectly okay to do, I liked how you made Michelle change throughout the story, in love with Luhan but when he finds out he has a crush on her and tells her, she acts