[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for TheCupcakeKiseoppian[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]A Rose A Week[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: A Rose A Week

Author: TheCupcakeKiseoppian

Main Characters: TVXQ, SNSD; Tiffany, Seohyun, Taeyeon, OC's, SECRET, KARA

Genre: Action, Drama, Friendship, Romance

Status: On-going

Description of Story: It is 1962 and the life of Max Changmin in Seoul, South Korea has only took a turn for the better. He's got the car, the house, the girls, the vip seats in clubs and parties, he's got the money and most important? He's got the job. But when a young maiden, a sweet young girl that works at a candy shop deliver him sweets at his home he feels ready to risk everything to be with her.

From yeolwho05: To TheCupcakeKiseoppian, I'm terribly sorry. It's my mistake. I accidentally asked two of our reviewers to review your story.... I still hope you consider both the reviews though. Anyway, sorry again! T^T /bows/

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 4/5

Your story has an intriguing sort of feel given off from the title, although it might not intrigue readers enough to want to check out your story. All in all, though, I find the title very fitting.

Graphics: 7.5/10

I suppose this could work, although it could use a bit of color – it might just be one of my pet peeves, so never mind. The font used on the poster, though, is pretty hard to read. The background is okay, but I suggest getting another poster, because I’ve noticed that posters are also a main factor in garnering more readers (it’s just a suggestion ^^)

Description and Foreword: 7/10

Your description was quite short, and didn’t look like you’d put much effort into writing it. The description is a critical area in your story, since readers will be viewing it before they decide that they want to continue reading your story. It was fine, though: I liked how you described his life, luxuries and all, but I suggest you put some punctuation and correcting your verbs in between some words. For example:

Original: “He’s got the car, the house, the girls, the vip seats in clubs and parties, he’s got the money and most important? He’s got the job.”
Edited: “He’s got the car, the house, the girls, the VIP seats in clubs and parties, the money, but most importantly, he’s got the job.”
Original: “But when a young maiden, a sweet young girl that works at a candy shop deliver him sweets at his home he feels ready to risk everything to be with her.”
Edited: “But when a young maiden, a sweet young girl who works at a candy shop, delivers him sweets to his home, he feels ready to risk everything to be with her.”

Characterization: 7/10

So far, though, I don’t see any distinct personality trait of any of the characters. Try and make each of your characters stand out – this is your story, customize your characters however you want them! :)

Plot: 38/40

Your plot has a pleasant twist from the usual cliché storylines – but you must know ho