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"Equidistant"

Author: fishyforlife

Main Characters: Anaea (OC), Lu Han, and Sehun

Genre: Alternate Universe, Angst, Drama, Fantasy, Romance

Status: On-going

Description of Story:
It's about parallel worlds that collided centuries before today, and how Lu Han (a human) enters the other world and meets Anaea. Earth and Regnum (the other world) though are two of which that are extremely against each other's beliefs and traditions. The two, together with some other characters, will try to stop not only the conflict between the two globes, but also their impossible relationship and the current discrimination of classes within their own communities.

 


 

  Critique:


Story Title: 3/5

I must say that your current title is quite appealing. however, i like the old title more (Equidistant) because it's more interesting and its not oftenly used by authors in AFF. But the thing is it suits the story really well because they're from the different world/universe.

 

Graphics: 2/10

Because I tend to focus more on a story's graphic, I think I'll be pointing a lot of things.

Firstly about the colour. Personally, I think the colour that you used doesn't really suit to the story. It's too reddish-bright. I suggest you to add more fade element and saturation more. But if you don't want to, you can use other colour, such as: http://www.colourlovers.com/palette/3581250/*?widths=0

About the quotes. I think you included too much quotes in the poster. It would be a lot nicer if you would only include the most attracting/interesting quote in it. You can just include thomas

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