Author: frost-child

Main Characters: Yoona, Luhan, Sehun

Genre: Friendship, Romance

Status: On-going

Description of Story: The whirlwind, forbidden romance of a man falling in love and his wedding planner. A story of romance, friendship, sacrifice and freedom.

Graphics: 6/10

The poster was fine, I guess. With Yoona’s picture, it was evident that a wedding was involved. There were a few things that bothered me though, like the fact that the picture was blurry. I don’t know if that was intentional, but yeah. It would’ve been better if the poster looked somewhat in high definition. Moreover, the pictures used for Yoona and Luhan was quite mismatching, in my opinion. Yoona’s picture was of blue, whilst Luhan’s was of red. Although it may differ because of their personalities, still, I think light colors would do the thing, especially since the other elements, such as the dividers, the font, and the background, had been soft-looking. The background didn’t match the poster either. Nevertheless, I think a fancy poster would do, especially since we’re talking about weddings here. Moreover, I think it would’ve been better if Yoona’s occupation – being the wedding planner – was more evident. She looked like the one getting married instead. Other than that, I guess all is fine. P.S. The title kind of bothered me since it looked like the end of letter W was poking Yoona’s nose. ^^

Characterization: 7/10

To be honest, their personalities were a bit cliché for my liking – this has something to do with the plot. Their personalities didn’t really fascinate me, to the when I could predict their next actions, too. If you want to create characters that fascinate, make them likable, relatable, flawed – and unique. Luhan was the typical rich guy in a story – stoic-faced, cocky, strict, a bit materialistic, etc. Maybe give him a few quirks? What makes a person – and a character – individual are their unique little habits and mannerisms. One good method for coming up with fitting quirks is to look at the people around you. Also, try to surround your character with people who are different from him, and you’ll emphasize his uniqueness.

The same goes with Yoona. She seemed to be the typical innocent, female character in the story – which contradicts her a bit since she was already old enough in the story; she was a wedding planner at that, too. That being said, she should’ve accumulated much experience from different fields; not just not in love life, but with the other factors in life, as well. Create multi-dimensional characters by giving them traits that don’t usually go together, and you’ll have a fresh take on an old cliché. It all goes through stereotypes, which I think you should avoid. The bottom line is that readers like the unexpected–in plot lines, in endings, and in characters.

I had also been confused with a few things. For example: Lee Hyungjook. Lee Miyoung. Lee Fei.

These names were from Fei’s mother, father, and her own. Don’t you think that it’s bit weird when she had a Chinese name when her parents had Korean names? This itself gives us a confusion with the setting. She didn’t seem to have a Chinese blood, either, and even if she did, at least use her Korean name instead so as to avoid confusion.

There were a few confusing scenes as well with regards to the consistency and the unity of your characters; actions.

“Where are the blankets?” As soon as Yoona said this she was smacked on the face by a fluffy white blanket.

“Sorry. Take it, I’ll get my own.” Luhan said sheepishly and took a blanket from one of the cabinets.

In contrast to Luhan’s seemingly stiff personality at first, he see