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[CONTENTID2]The Revival of Angel Sword [ D' Empires Academy ][/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: The Revival of Angel Sword [ D' Empires Academy ]

Author: Lu-llaby

Main Characters: Sehun and Luhan

Genre: Action, Angst, Fantasy/Supernatural,

Status: On-going

Description of Story: Five hundred years ago, Vampires and Demons were alliance. They became one after The Dark Knight ed The Angel Sword on the boundary between Demons area and Vampires area, connecting the two area as one. Now, Vampires and Demons didn't rule the world, humans are the leader even though Vampires and Demons are stronger than human. But for the two kind's sake, they let humans become the rule. And there's D' Empires Academy. The Academy that humans built for Demons and Vampires. The students study in peace there. Luhan is a Demon on that Academy a popular one because his face looks like a Vampire, beautiful. And his black eyes clears their doubt of whether he's a demon or vampire. But what if one day he find one of D' Empires's student have one black eye and the other is red - a vampire's eye color?

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 5/5

I honestly really like it ^^ Very fantasy like , you did a great job. It caught my eye and I was interested to read more on it :) You don't need to do this but you could add in a background, that's not too eye catching since it would clash in with the poster too harshly . 

Graphics: 8.5/10

I liked how you put two different posters , one of with two main characters and one with all or most of the characters ^^ Sometimes readers get bored with only one poster revolving on two people :) It's good how there was the eye colours in it, it shows the demons and the vampires 

Description and Foreword: 9.5/10

It's really good, I liked how you put the history of how Vampires and Demons.^^ When you said that Vampires and Demons were alliances, 500 years ago why would the Dark Knight need to use the Angel Sword to make peace? Aren't alliances meant to work together? It's fine the way it is but people may get confused..like I did then, 5 minutes later I understood -_-' There's just some grammar errors that you could fix: 
Original: Five hundred years ago, Vampires and Demons were alliance. They became one after The Dark Knight ed The Angel Sword on the boundary between Demons area and Vampires area, connecting the two area as one.
Now, Vampires and Demons didn't rule the world, humans are the leader even though Vampires and Demons are stronger than human. But for the two kind's sake, they let humans become the rule. 
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