[CONTENTID1]Archive : Review for KooJaeHee[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]Innocent Love[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Innocent Love

Author: KooJaeHee

Main Characters: Kwon Haerin (OC), Kim Jongin

Genre: Angst, Friendship, Romance

Status: Completed

Description of Story: Love story between two bestfriends.

 

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 2.5/5

Your title was fine. I didn't find it unique since the title was abit common and I found it hard to differentiate it with the other stories in this genre.

Graphics: 8.5/10

Your graphics was ok. I like the poster. It was cute and it portrayed the 'Innocent Love' of the two characters. Your background matched your poster as well, so good job. The only problem was that the color was a bit dull. You used gray and it looked boring to me. (Maybe it's just me.)

Description and Foreword: 7/10

Actually, I like your desciption. It was simple, but you should correct the grammar somehow. It should be like this: In the description: There is no long distance about love. It always finds a way to bring two hearts together... ...no matter how many miles there are between them. In the foreword: "Do you hate me?" She asks with a disappointed face as she left the room. As she was out of sight, a pair of eyes slowly opened as he woke up from the bed. "Yes, I hate you..." "...because you made me madly in love with you." -----> I just changed your capitalization and put periods. (It's your decision if you want to change it.)

Also, change Character into Characters. (in the character chart)

Characterization: 9/10

There was no problem with your characterization. I think you explained their characters well enough althoughout the chapter.

Plot: 29/40

The plot was fine. I like how realistic it is that I can relate to some scenes in the story. It was too cliche though for me. I have read a lot of stories like this one so I didn't find it that interesting. You could have put more twists on it to make it more interesting. You could have put something that will make the readers differentiate your story from the other fics here on AFF with the same theme/plot. I like the ending though. There