Calling for creepyweirdo

"A Common Phrase Like I Miss You"

Author: creepyweirdo

Main Characters: BTS V and Jungkook

Genre: Fluff, Romance,

Status: Completed

Description of Story:
It’s just about Taehyung trying to sincerely let Jungkook go to collage half planet away from him.
And about Jungkook missing Taehyung like crazy and feels like he is the only one who feels that way.
Oh, and don’t forget about Jimin feeling tired of being called as a delusional midget.

 

  Critique:

Story Title: 3/5

Choosing the right title for your story is really important. Like what I've said before in my previews reviews, it should not be dull. For example, when you go to the romance section here on AFF, aren't you more attracted to unusual titles. Also, titles should be easy to remember. This is a very critical point for titles. It's better if your readers are able to remember your story through your title so that the "word-of-mouth" will be executed easily. Another thing is that titles should be approprite for your story. In your case, well it is appropriate, but you could've chose a shorter title, which is meaningful yet eye-catching at the same time. A tip maybe is a title that has a hidden meaning behind it, like if a symbolism took place in your story, you can use that so that you're somehow leaving your readers hanging, and at the same time surprising them when it was later revealed. Oh and usually, a one-word-title does the trick. If you're planning on doing so, pick an intense one word title which has a deep yeat meaningful meaning behind it, but make sure that it's appropriate for your story.

Anyway, always remember that the main reason why a story's title is important is because it gives off clues to something in the story, enabling the reader to understand an event in a particular way. Also, titles are used to give an idea of the style of the story, like is it to be takes seriously or as a joke. Your title somehow gave out the idea of the story since V and Jungkook's feelings for each other were well-portrayed; however, common titles like that doesn't really work that effective as it was back then. Like for me, it didn't really job my imagination, thus if I were in a reader's shoes, I wouldn't really proceed to read your story.

On the other hand, if you're not planning on replacing the title, think about this one: A Common Phrase Like: I Miss You or A Common Phrase Like 'I Miss You' So for the first one, I suggested it since it was put like that in your poster, so placing your title with a semicolon complements your graphics. For the second one though, I just put single quotation marks since I felt like it, and it somehow looks better since the phrase I Miss You was emphasized more.

 

Graphics: 7/10

First of all, I admire you for getting a poster plus a background for your story. I can't say that they complemented each other though since the poster looked soft and somehow angsty while V's pictures on the background were all cute and aegyos. For your poster, well I like the softness of it. It somehow looked romantic, especially Jungkook's gaze on V; they both looked cute on the poster. My only issue would be the extra picture below, and maybe the font used since I didn't fancy it. For the grass picture below, it would've been better if it was somehow connected to the plot or story, but unfortunately, it wasn't. For the background, like I've said before, it didn't really complement the poster, although the color was soft and it didn't really contradict with the latter.

Overall, your graphics are fine. I don't think you need to replace them since there's no really need to. You may do so for the background though. You can request for a background from the same poster shop you requested to, or you could just find something the complements the poster more, since I noticed that the color is mismatched, and it would really be better if it was.

 

Description and Foreword: 4/10

Your description wasn't enticing at all. A description containing two sentences is quite understandable since this is a threeshot after all, but then again, it should still have that what-the-hell-happened factor wherein you attract your readers by cliffhangers and whatnot. In your case, you were like telling someone what the story is all about, and you weren't really planning on attracting someone to read it. You were plainly relaying the short summary of your story; of what it's all about, and it's quite disappointing. Also, since this is a mere threeshot and the plot is somehow small, putting up a description like that is like you're telling the readers all of what's on the plot, and that's a really bad move.

A description is your chance to speak directly to your readers about why you wrote the story, what it’s about, and why it’s important. As it is an introduction to your story, a description should include information about the plot. Consider including a few or all of the following ideas:

Give a brief description of the story; the main characters, or themes. Give just enough to get the reader interested in reading more; don’t give anything away. Make sure your description fits all the elements of your story. I've read stories before wherein their description was indeed interesting, but once I read the story, I was disappointed because it wasn't connected, and it really didn't match my expectations. Make it sound as unique as possible. It's what usually readers are after once they visit your story, so if your description is more than enough to attract them, they might read your story. Describe the story along with the characters. Remember not to put too much information as it may ruin the surprise/twist of the story. Basically, the description is a short summary of the story itself; however, it is what comes out of the listing pages here on AFF, so it's better to make it as unique as possible so readers would be attracted into reading it.

My second issue would the font you used. Stick with one or two fonts maybe. For your description, even though it's short, you didn't have to enlarge it's font just to make it look... bigger. It looked weird and... it somehow made me cringe. Try decreasing the font, use Avira Garde as your font (since it's the font you used for your chapters, plus, it looks presentable), and try aligning it at the center. I bet it looks better and more presentable than before.

I have not issue with the quote you put on your foreword, however, I really don't have an issue regarding it, but I noticed that it somehow contained some of V's and Jungkook's words. I'm not sure who it is but I think V said a line which goes with that quote. I think it's better if you put two quotes on your foreword, V's and Jungkook's, pertaining to their emotions and affections of them missing the other one. Something like that...

As for the credits section, well it's fine I guess, but the empty space on the right is somehow distracting, but then again, there's nothing I could do about that so I think this wraps it all up for your description/foreword.

 

Characterization: 5/10

Preferred romantic stories are universal yet unique. They tap into shared emotions with story-specific details of character, time, and place that transport us to the world created by the writer. A great romance story makes us believe in love. Not just that love exists, but that this love between these two people is somehow going to last and endure. How? By telling the truth. By combining those universal truths, emotional truth, with the thrill and struggle of two unique people falling in love and working their way toward commitment and their own happy ending. I'm giving you a thumbs up for this one. There were somehow realistic scenes to which I can relate to even though it came out hard for me since I rarely read stories, but you didn't fail to make me admire you at some point, although there were a lot of questionable parts for me.

For Jungkook, well, I didn't really see the charact