"Graduation Song"

Author: gonexx

Main Characters: Xiumin, Luhan, Chanyeol, Baekhyun, Suho, Sehun

Genre: Fluff, Gender Bending, Romance, School Life

Status: On-going

Description of Story:
Minseok and Junmywon doesn't know what to think when they were picked to sing in their senior's graduation event.
 

Story Title: 3/5

Although the title fits the story quite fine, however, I feel that this title is a little cliched since it is the name of a song and I’ve read several fics with the same title before. I would suggest that you tweak the title to something that’s unique to your story. :) 

Graphics: 5/10

I like that you have gotten yourself both a background and a poster, it made the whole ambience fluffier and cuter. xD However, do take note of the link between your graphics and your story. From what I’ve read, this story is about school life, but I don’t see this crucial theme being reflected on your poster. Perhaps you could have gotten pictures of exo wearing school uniforms? Otherwise, I think this poster is really cute, especially the moving words. :D 

Description and Foreword: 4/10


(I’m going to be harsh here so here’s my apology in advance) First, I feel that whatever than you have written in your description column is rather redundant because I am already able to get these information from the tags of your story. Editing this part would be necessary.

Second, you might want to shift the things you wrote in the foreword section to the description section instead. Based on my knowledge as a literature student (do correct me if I’m wrong), the foreword of a book is for the author to express his/her opinions about the story/ book (e.g. where he/she got the inspiration from, or what he/she would like to say to the readers). Instead of describing the story in this section, maybe you could tell the readers more about yourself so as to bring the distance between you guys closer? 

Thirdly, regarding the description of the story that you’ve written (I’m talking about the chunk of words you’ve written under the foreword section by the way), in my opinion, you should cut down on the dialogue. Here’s my suggested edit: 

(Original) 

When the door finally closes, Minseok and Junmyeon immediately let out a frustrated sigh as the elder slumps lifelessly on her chair. "Junnie... I can't do this. We can't do this."
"I know."
"We're gonna mess the whole thing."
"I know."
"We're going to be like Baekhyun in her 7th -"
"Minseok, i know. Can you not bring up 7th grade?? I was there too y'know."

(Edited)

As the door swung shut, both Minseok and Junmyeon heaved sighs of frustration and slumped on their chairs. 
“Junnie… I can’t do this… We can’t do this…” Minseok mumbled, running a hand through her hair. 
Seeing J