[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for soul_ly[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]You Were The One[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: You Were The One

Author: soul_ly

Main Characters: Taemin (Shinee), Park Hwan Hui (Hana, Ulzzang)

Genre: Angst

Status: Completed

Description of Story: You were the one that kept me in check, the one that yelled at me, annoyed the out of me. But for some reason, I couldn't stay away. Everything you did just fascinated me. Everything you desired became my command. Everything you loathed, became my eternal enemy. You were my everything.

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 2/5

The title wasn't that unique for me since you only used common words which is difficult if you'd try to distingush it with the other stories here on AFF. It's too simple. I was confused though because the concept doesn't match the story.

Graphics: 0/0
I won't be grading this one since you don't have a poster nor a background but you did put some lay-outs in your story which is good enough. You should try putting up a poster because basically that's what readers see first. Most readers would read a story if they felt attracted to the graphics. It's a sad reality, yes, but we can't really do anything about it.

Description and Foreword: 7.5/10

The description you made at the story was good enough. It attracted me to read your story so good job. One thing though, you should try increasing the spacing a little bit since it's too contracted. Also, increase your font size since it's too small. I had a hard time reading it because of the size.

Characterization: 8.5/10

There was no problem with your characterization. Taemin's split personality was clear and it was very dramatic. You could have explained Hana's side more clearly though. If you put her name in the main characters of the story, it should be clear that she would play an important part of the story. In your story though, she did play an important part in the story but it still lacks explanation. Idk. I just felt like you need