Author: eunhyuksgal

Main Characters: Eunhyuk and Donghae (Super Junior)

Genre: Angst, Friendship, Romance, , 

Status: Completed

Description of Story:
Tired of being controlled at home and work, Hyukjae decides to seek an avenue in which to release his own thirst for dominance. He stumbles upon Opera, a club where he indulges in his darkest, deepest fantasies, and gets more than he bargained for in the mysterious partner he finds there.

Story Title: 3.5/5

Honestly, I was drawn to your story a bit by the story title, but it wasn’t the big hook that drew me in right away. I really liked how it had a bit of a double meaning (at least to me), regarding how both Donghae and Eunhyuk kept up a “masquerade” throughout the story, and the actual aspect with the masks they physically wore when they saw each other. To summarize: I took off some points because it’s not the most original name on the site, however it tied in very nicely to the story.

Appearance: 8/10

a. Poster and Background. 3/5

I think the main poster and background worked very well to set the original tone of the story: dark, y, and mysterious. The only problem with me was the coloring of the letters on the main poster feels a bit awkward (with the red and black), as well as the puzzle pieces with some character faces in them just makes me confused since puzzle pieces don’t really match the theme. Regarding some of the chapter posters, it sometimes confused me when there would be one with a hooded figure (forgive me, I love Suju but I’m still rough with their faces) and another figure just sitting on a stool. If there was a pattern to this and it went right over my head, I deeply apologize!

All in all, it still looks very well done!

b. Lay-out and Formatting. 5/5

I was on my mobile the first time I read Masquerade, and I was not disappointed. The fonts were legible, and there were no awkward sizes or colors that make reading fanfics a torturous experience for my poor eyes. Sometimes there was a very subtle font size difference for some chapters, but it hardly made a difference to me. Well done!

Description and Foreword: 7/10

I think your description is close to perfect. It’s simple and to the point, yet it provides the reader with that essential first taste of the story that reels them in. However, for readers like me, I would’ve definitely taken the bait faster if there was just a bit more in the description. I just have a serious issue with reading or watching something that I don’t have a good description of, but in this case a little goes a long way! The foreword was nice, especially since you reiterated the fact that this was a seriously hardcore story, and it wouldn’t be a simple -without-plot story. Amazing job on both the description and foreword!

Character Development: 9/15

a. Unity of the Characters and Their Actions. 3/5

Some parts confused me; when Donghae speaks to Eunhyuk about not wanting to be dominated in a relationship, it really sent me reeling back as I firmly thought Aiden and Donghae were one and the same. Sometimes it surprised me how Donghae could be very sensitive (ex. when they were eating seafood, Eunhyuk joked that he was eating Nemo’s family and Donghae became upset) yet it was like he was a completely different person while being intimate. Perhaps that’s the whole idea surrounding Aiden/Donghae, but there was just a bit too much distinction placed on each of them. Another thing that kind of bugged me was that when Donghae found out that Spencer was Eunhyuk the whole time, he didn’t tell him. Wouldn’t it make sense to tell his lover that it was, in fact, him the whole time? Either way, the characters still worked well for me and other than the things mentioned above, their actions felt worked well for them. Great job :3

b. Evolution of Characters. 2/5

Alrightie, let’s start with both of our mains: Euhyuk and Donghae. Neither of them change very dramatically throughout the st