[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for --obsidian[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]Loch Colpach[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Loch Colpach

Author: --obsidian

Main Characters: Lee Donghae, Lee Hyukjae (Eunhyuk)

Genre: Fantasy/Supernatural, Mystery, Romance,

Status: Completed

Description of Story: "There's a lake that dominates a clearing, deep in the forest beside the shantytown that Donghae calls home. In this lake, is a creature of myth, only Donghae knows that not all mythological creatures are fake, because he's seen this one. And it's calling him."

 

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 5/5

Your title sounds very interesting and unique. It doesn't sound clique nor common so I have nothing bad to say about that. Those titles are very good to read because it attracts the reader. Good job.

 

Graphics: 6/10

You didn't have a background but did have a graphic. Your graphics was okay but it didn't appeal much to me. 

 

Description and Foreword: 5/10

I liked how you tried not to tell the reader too much information. However, it was way too short so I suggest you expand it a little bit. 

 

Characterization: 7/10

Because your story is a one-shot, it is quiet hard to develop a character tha