"Peter Pan"

Author: iLupinus

Main Characters: Fem!Xiumin, Luhan, Fem!Chen

Genre: Drama, Gender Bending, Romance

Status: Completed

Description of Story:
Minseon has fought more than her fair share of pirates, and she's barely holding on. A meeting with an eternal child gives her the strength to keep going.

Story Title: 4/5

Title wise, it was a good choice – not only for the fact that the story has such a deep relevance to the title but for the fact that you directly used the name of a Disney character/book/animation. Most people remember Peter Pan from their childhood and it WILL appeal to them instantly. Although, it seems quite a few others felt the same as me since it’s a fairly used name. Still… I like it. ^^

Graphics: 9/10

I really like your poster. It was simple and if one reads the story (both the classic and your fic) they’ll understand the parallelism. Minseon and LuHan floating in the air over like Wendy and Peter Pan.

Description and Foreword: 8/10

The description was very well written – you told us what the theme of the story is (which one would understand if they read the story) and mentioned the two main characters in it too. Also, I liked how you referred to Lu Han as ‘an eternal child’. It added to the mystery and made me want to know what that was about.

An improvement could be to not state it. The sentence at the moment is a statement type, something more poetic might’ve increased the effect. But, this is pretty good too. 

Characterization: 3/10

Okay in this respect I have no option but to grade you low. The oneshot length was short and almost fully dialogue based