[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for CoolUsername[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]Love Lock[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Love Lock

Author: CoolUsername

Main Characters: EXO, Baekhyun, OC

Genre: Romance

Status: On-going

Description of Story: You are my dream. My fantasy. And my reality. I'm just another fan in the crowd. You may not notice me. But I'm so proud. Because we're standing on the same ground. Just an another fan. Watching you from afar. Wishing at a shooting star. For you to notice me before I'm gone. You are my dream, my fantasy, and my reality

 

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 3.5/5

I love the title. You can clearly tell what theme/genre the story is going to be with that title. The 'love lock' was relevant to the story as well so it was perfect for a title. I can't say that it was unique though. A good example is typing your story in Google. I types it and many stories from AFF popped out. It just proved that the title wasn't that unique, but you can definitely win the title with your plot.

Graphics: 8/10

The poster was good. It was kind of gloomy for me though. I felt like it was more angst than of romance. Jieun and Baekhyun's picture was too light compared to the background, which is both good and bad for me. Good, because it emphasized the characters, but bad since it didn't quite match the other elements of the poster. The title could have been more noticable as well. But overall, the poster was still nice. I also acknowledge the fact that you used a lay-out for your description. I'll give you plus points for that. You might want to think of putting up a background as well. Your readers won't see your poster all the time. Adding a background can add effects. It's just my suggestion though. You still have the final say. :>

Description and Foreword: 8/10

I liked the description. I honestly find descriptions written like poetry unique. Not many users/authors here in AFF use that style so I acknowledge the fact that you use that one. Just a suggestion though. At the first three lines, you said that "You are my dream, my fantasy and my reality." At the end of the poem, you also stated that. I just think that it might be better if you remove one of them, since it seemed too redundant for me. It's mu opinion though so.... :)

Also, the brief summary you put below the poem was a bit mis-matching. Maybe it's just me though?

Anyway, capitalize the namsan tower. It should be Namsam tower, since we're talking about proper nouns here. Also, I think it would be better to replace "of course not" by no, since the question for that would either answer yes or no.

Characterization: 9/10