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[CONTENTID2]Black Wings[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Black Wings

Author: fasiha1234 and RedVenom

Main Characters: Eunmi (OC), Baekhyun, EXO

Genre: Fantasy/Supernatural, Mystery, Romance

Status: On-going

Description of Story: It all started when she turned 12 years old. She saw him. She saw them. She saw their wings. She saw their black wings.

 

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 4/5

Your title is good. It isn't really unique since the title is a little bit common but at first glance, you could tell that it was fantasy-themed and it was very relevant to the story. Good job.

Graphics: 9/10

I love your poster. It has that mysterious feeling in it. The poster should emphasize the wings more though. It should be noticable and eye-catching for me since you have to emphasize the black wings as it is very relevant to your story. If you were to ask me, I'd choose the poster made by paperplane but the girl had the wings in it so idk. But still, I like your poster. :D Sorry if I confused you. :D

Description and Foreword: 9/10

Actually, I love your desciption. It was very simple yet straight-forward. It contained the necessary information a description must have. It was still fine even though it turned out too redundant since you repeated most ot the words. I also like the scenario you posted on the foreword. It would be better if you replaced 'them' with 'they though, so it'd be like this: "What are you talking about? Who are they?"

I understand that you repeated the word them to emphasize what her mother said but some of the readers may misunderstand it as wrong grammas. Idk, maybe it's just me. -_-

Characterization: 8/10

I think you introduced the characters quite well. The first chapter though. I think you introduced them too quickl