"What is "perfection"?"

Author: Fallenenigma

Main Characters: Kai, Sehun.

Genre: Fluff, Romcom

Status: On-going

Description of Story:
For the perfectsionist Oh Sehun, Luhan is his definition of "perfection".
Pretty, elegant, smart, charming.
Simply flawless.
But Sehun's mom wanted Sehun to marry Kai instead.
And for Sehun, Kai is only an ugly disturance that should be kicked out.
What will happen when Sehun has to stay under the same roof with Kai for 3 months?
Is it still hatred, or will it turn into love?

Story Title: 2.5/5

Title is important. A title should be used as a very valuable tool for writers to grasp their potential readers interest. A title is the identity of a story: an identity which stands true from the start of it's journey right until the last stop. So for such important element of the story to be fully effective, it needs to qualify in a number of tests. The tests checks how meaningful, unique, memorable and reflective of genre the title is.

Sorry to say but to me your title is not unique. I try to find it in Google Custom Search and there are lots of “Perfection” fics in any kind of genres out there. At first glance, it doesn’t fascinate me to try to read it further. If I come across your fic some other time in AFF, there’s huge chance I won’t give it a try.

I take it you want to give some different meaning by putting quotation marks on perfection but to me it looks a little bit off. I suggest you to use different title for this story especially you have already finished it.

Graphics: 8/10

Well, your graphics (in this case, your poster only) seems nice. It fits to your story nicely. I take two points because the title do this beep beep thingy. On and off, on and off. Somehow it feels off and annoy me. I didn’t take out your point from lack of background. It’s not fair to mark something that doesn’t exist but it would be nice to have background, especially since your story is the fluff one. Usually background can help the story look more fluffy, no?

Description and Foreword: 3/10

I know you have asked not to focus on your grammar but in this rubric, unfortunately for you, grammar is one thing that we, the reviewer, put our attention the most. Well, firstly if you want to have some nice review that give you compliment and sugar-coating everything, I’m not your girl. Sorry not sorry.

Secondly, I try to be fair everytime I review a story. Mainly because I, myself, am a writer. I know how hard it is to write something. Another reason is because I want a budding writer like you know which part to be, for lack of better words, “repaired” or need more attention. You have talent in writing a story, I can feel and see that but you still have a long way to go.

Let’s start with your description first:

If the perfectsionist Sehun has to choose between the "perfect" Luhan and the carefree Kai, what will he do?
I’ve bold the part that irked me. Perfectsionist

At first, I got confused when I saw the word. Something felt off, so I tried to find it in the dictionaries (yes, I looked into more than one dictionary) and ...

Do you mean perfectionist?

I know English is