"Letters from the Future"

Author: kAndApAndA

Main Characters: Sehun, Jongin (Kai) and Luhan

Genre: Angst, Friendship, Romance, School Life, 

Status: On-going

Description of Story:
One day, 16 year old Sehun receives a letter from himself, ten years in the future. At first of course it seems like a joke but everything that the letter said would happen did happen, including the arrival of the new transfer student, Kim Jongin. The 26 year old him tells him to fix up the mistakes that he regrets making when he was his age and tells him to keep a very close eye on Jongin. But why?

Story Title: 2.5/5

Your title is very self-explanatory and right away we know that it has some sort of futuristic element to it. In terms of the interesting quality, it does seem to lack the wow factor that would pull readers in to click on the story. The problem is, it just doesn’t stand out, sure we get what the story may entail, but is it necessarily intriguing? Maybe not as much as it can be. Nonetheless, the title strongly connects to your plot and to the overall theme.

Graphics: 8/10

The poster seems a bit plain and other than the lines on the poster there’s not much that connects to the title. Nonetheless, the emphasis on Sehun and Kai are nicely done but I find Luhan’s facial expression a bit out of place? Maybe that’s just me but it seems a bit awkward. Overall the poster is very simplistic. However it just would have been nice if there was more representation on the poster to the title.

Description and Foreword: 9/10

The tenses are wonderful and the description is fascinating to read. Right away, we connect to the title nicely there and the plot is explained without giving too much away. (It’s not as bad as you think!) Though I have to say by using the song “How to save a Life” is a bit of a spoiler already if someone listens to the lyrics especially when you leave the description off with a question, since it literally answers it. Now I’m not saying that you should remove it or anything, but just keep it mind that it does ruins the story. (But anyways, great taste in song choices.) 

Afterwards you state information like the genre, pairing, rating, etc which is nice as that usually goes with a foreword. Everything is laid out nicely and there are no grammatical mistakes so well done. 

Characterization: 7/10

There’s something missing in terms of the people that you’ve introduced so far. You haven’t really gone into depth about them, and because of the lack of descriptive writing, readers don’t necessarily know much about the characters. However I’ll give you the benefit of the doubt that since it’s still the beginning stages of the story, that’s why there’s not much to work with right now. On the other hand, despite it being in Sehun’s POV for the most part, it’s Luhan that we know more about than the two main characters of the story. I’m sure that you’ll definitely improve in later chapters though.

Plot: 34/40

Despite the story just starting out, I would say that you’ve established a clear plot right at the beginning and already, it’s interesting to read. Right away, you have introduced the characters, and the instigator that drives them (more specifically Sehun) to do what they have to do. In fact because the pacing is nicely done, the plot is moving along steadily. There’s not much else I can penalize you for here, but it’s—like I said—just really beginning and in addition to that, it would be more enthralling to read if you can just add a bit more descriptive writing to the story. Readers like to connect to a story, and imagining the plot before their eyes. What are the character’s thoughts? What are their actions? Why do they do this and that? You just sort of scratch the beginnings of the imagination without fully sinking your teeth into it