"Cheesy Pizzas"

Author: _BabyExotic

Main Characters: Baekhyun and Soojin (OC)

Genre: Angst, Romance

Status: On-going

Description of Story:
Opposites attracts. It was stated by Coulomb's law that unlike terms attracts. When a girl and a boy from two different class met, they attracted each other. But the afluents once said that one cannot befriend others that are not the same as them. A thing called love is to follow one's heart. Coulomb's law brought them together, affluent's law seperated them and love's law made them fight for their love but the question is, which one of these laws will give them a happy ending?

Story Title: 2.5/5

A title is a story’s first impression. People make a first impression with appearance, wardrobe and body language. Stories do it with a title, that's why titles are extremely important. A title creates anticipation and expectation or, perhaps, disinterest. Often the title is what will determine whether or not someone reads a story. Let's think of it as the first step in officially advertising/promoting your story. It's with an attractive title that makes a reader want to read a story, to be honest. Here in Asianfanfics.com, stories are commonly placed in section through tags, or through categories in general. Frankly, there are thousands of stories here on AFF, so clearly, there's no assurance that you're story'll be read by readers' that suddenly. So yeah. You have to really do a good job with choosing the right title.

I can't say that your title is unique since that title is a bit overused here on Asianfanfics. I think I've read three or four stories with the same title. For me, uniqueness is important. For instance, if a story with the same title as yours gets popular, there's a high possibility that your stories will get differentiated. There's no copyright with titles though, but then again, it's still important to think out-of-the-box. There are a lot of stories here on Asianfanfics so it's best to indirectly market your stories through your title. This of it as the first step in advertising your stories. I mean, readers normally get attracted with unique yet catchy and relevant titles. Relevance-wise, I guess it's a bit relevant to your plot since your story talks about two persons who are polar opposites. I still think that there's a better title for your story. I'm not telling you to change anything though. I'm just stating my opinion after all.

Graphics: 0/0

Since you don't have a poster nor a background, I'll be removing this section from the over-all grading. I suggest requesting from a graphic shop though. There are a lot of graphic shops out there who'd be more than willing to provide you your graphics. Make sure to request that of what suits the main genres of your story. Make sure to request for a complementing background as well. It'll add to the physical attractiveness of your story; plus, your readers won't see your poster all the time, so a complementing background would make the story less dull in a reader's eyes.​

Description and Foreword: 6/10

First of all, the font you used is fine, although I think you should be consistent with the font you use since the font for chapter one is different from that of your description. Try to consider justifying it as well, or maybe align it at the center to make it less boring. I suggest justifying it instead since it's a long paragraph. As for the brief summary placed in your description section, I can say that it's catchy and attractive. It did catchy my interest; however, the grammatical and typographical mistakes dragged the description down. I do admire you for relating some theories and everything, but I still think it's a bit blurry. First of all, not all readers know of those laws. Moreover, I don't think there are such laws/theories such as affluent's law and love's law. Correct me if I'm wrong though. I'm assuming that you only included them by their literal meaning? Anyway, I'm not sure myself. For now, I'll be providing my revised/improved version of your description:

(Revised Version) Opposites attract. It was stated by Coulumb's law that unlike terms attract. Likewise, when a boy and a girl from different classes meet, they would attract each other. However, the affluents once said that one cannot befriend others that are not of the same class as him. On the other hand, loving means to follow one's heart. Coulomb's law brought them together, the affluents' law separated them, and love's law made them fight for their love, but the question is, which one of these laws will give them a happy ending?

I corrected most of the errors I saw, and I may have changed a couple of words here and there. Teehee. I just think that they sound better. Moreover, I think you should divide that description into three part; with the first part containing the sentences one to three, the second part containing the fourth part but with some additional information with regards to love or love's law in particular, and the thrid part pertaining to the fifth and last sentence wherein it somehow made the readers curious as to which law would give them a happy ending.

Anyway, I suggest making some research and maybe correct some information, mainly because those information you placed there might get questioned. Just make sure that the information you will use is accurate and proven to prevent unnecessary situations to occur in the future. Overall, the description is catchy and interesting. The way you related those laws made the description interesting and somehow unique, and yeah. You did a good job with your description. It didn't really give out a lot of information that needed, so kudos for that. I'd be cutting out a few poi