[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for OhSeYeon[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]After Fan Meeting "Hello Japan"[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: After Fan Meeting "Hello Japan"

Author: OhSeYeon

Main Characters: Baekhyun and Chanyeol

Genre: Angst, Friendship, Romance

Status: Completed

Description of Story: after the fan meeting, Chanyeol got mad. He felt betrayed. He felt ... Baekhyun was so confused with Chanyeol. Since the 'chen' thing happen, he didn't smile at all after the fan meeting. Chanyeol thinks Baekhyun likes Chen more than He is. But then they had a huge fight that no one can stop them. Will they be together again ?

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 4/5

It is relevant to the story as it talks about after the fan meeting but, .After Fan Meeting "Hello Japan" is long and honestly if it wasn't a review request I wouldn't take a glance at it (Mianhe T^T), it's similar to what I thought about Simple Dimple Lay, kind off strange, like it's not complete. I think you should take "Hello Japan" out as it was the thing that confused me as I didn't know it was the name of the show they attended maybe talk about it in your authors note; "This is a story based from the show "Hello Japan which EXO attended" to make it less confusing^^

Graphics: 0/0

There wasn't really a poster, just a picture of Baekhyun and Chanyeol so I don't think that would really count. For the poster I would suggest something where Chanyeol is puffing his cheeks out to make him look angry but cute (aegyo) and have Baekhyun huffing (back to back) as I think it would link in with the story. Even thought his story is romance I don't think the poster should be soft (once you get one) as I think it would look angst a little bit or sad :3 I don't actually think much about the backgrounds unless it's meant to have a dark feeling from the story so I don't think you really need one 

Description and Foreword: 7.5/10

Just like Simple Dimple Lay, you used a bit from the story, which in some cases is fine and your one was fine ... Maybe if you wanted to change it to a short summary; Chanyeol gets mad at Baekhyun but why? Something that doesn't give out too much of the story but relates to it ^^  I overlooked it but you did write a summary in your foreword XD Anyway I would just switch it around so whatever you out in the foreword put it in the description vise

Characterization: 5.5/10

There honestly wasn't much, we could tell Chanyeol is the