[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for Aisyah98[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]My Love Babysitter[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: My Love Babysitter

Author: AiSyah98

Main Characters: Park Bora, Kai, Park Bora, Jackson

Genre: Fantasy, Romance, School Life

Status: On-going

Description of Story: You fallen for Kai,your babysitter who is 12 years older than you and same age with your older sister. But,you're just 5 years old girl. How Kai will look at you as a lady?.You just little girl.What more worst,your older sister fall for Kai too and she is really irritated you. She always ordering you around and such a jerk while act inoccent,pure and cute in front of Kai.One day Toothfairy come to your bedroom,but you make a wish for become 17 years old girl and make Kai fall for you.That Toothfairy called out his fairy friend and will grant your wish with one condition. That condition is you must not tell anyone that you're little Bora.If you tell that,you will die.Without thinking you just accept it. And then,your greatest competitor for get Kai is your own older sister.

 

 

CRITIQUE: 

Story Title: 3/5

The title was okay, I get what you're trying to imply with it, but it may lead to some confusions with the viewers but you should've added a comma or rephrased it to "My Love, My Babysitter." Then it would make more sense. 

Graphics: 7/10

It's nice that you have both bg and poster. But, it's more of a cute, fluffy story and the poster and bg gave off a bit of a serious, vintage and somewhat lonely vibe rather than a happy one. 

Description and Foreword: 7.5/10

Your description should be rephrased to:

"What On Earth will happen when a 5 year old becomes  a 17 year old girl?" instead of  "What on earth will happen when 5 years old become 17 years old girl?" 

Okay? n_n

The way you summarized was good, it was somewhat thrilling and you gave out enough information for the readers to anticipate, though you had some grammar mistakes and you lacked spacing, it was fine. Remember to add in space after your every period next time! ^^

Characterization: 9/10

It's nice that you introduced each main roles and even minor roles well and fairly in that way readers wouldn't lose track. 

Plot: 37/40

The plot was good, and you centered it on the love rivalry between the lead and her own older sister/sibling which is only occasionally