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[CONTENTID2]Blood Vengence[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Blood Vengence

Author: hotLover5

Main Characters: Jiyoung (Kara), Sehun (EXO), Kai (EXO)

Genre: Action, Mystery

Status: On-going

Description of Story: Jiyoung and Kai is a sweet couple until on efaithful day, she discovered Kai cheating behind her back. They broke up, and she wants to take revenge to Kai and s. * This story more to revenge story and dark romance*

 

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 4.5/5

The story wasn't that unique, but it has that feel in it. In all honesty, I like it. It was eye-catching, and since I really like reading stories within this genre, I was actually intruiged. I think the description you gave below.

 

Graphics: 7/10

Your poster was nice. It did have that dark aura that reflects the story's idea which is 'murder.' I just want to give some comments regarding it. I just think that the poster would have been better if better pictures for the characters were chosen. Also, the girl's picture should be the one enlarged since the story will revolve HER murder right? She didn't looked that vengeful either. I think it would make more sense if a picture of her glaring at you was put instead of the present one. I just think that when the readers see your poster, they wouldn't think that this is a story about murder since it doesn't really look like one. The same goes for the trailer. Anyway, the poster and the trailer wasn't made by you so don't feel discouraged. The designer as well. This is just based on my personal opinion anyway. ^^

 

Description and Foreword: 6/10

You didn't have problems with your description. There were no grammatical errors. The issue there is that you stated almost all of what's to come in the story. Be mindful of the things you put in your description. Where's the excitement in that when you already stated almost all of the scenes? It would be better if you didn't state that Sehun helped her with the revenge right? You can reveal him at the end of the story, making it unexpected. Have you watched the movie 'Scream 4'?? It kind of resembles it. ^^

Oh, and another thing, the group name 'Hottie' weirded me out. I don't think it's something you'd use to name your group. You could have just called them EXO, right?

The next issue for me is the font style, the font size, and the font colors you used. This one:

"For the rest of my days, I'll hunt you until the end. You will always be my prey.

I'll chase you. I'll raze my future just for you.

You’ll get what’s coming, reckless man!"

This is definitely not the style you use when making a murder fic. I know that you're probably emphasizing the words bolded and colored red, but there are other ways to do it. I used the font 'Courier New' for this one. This font works well with dark/murder fics like yours.

"For the rest of my days, I'll hunt you until the end. You will always be my prey.

I'll chase you. I'll raze my future just for you.

You’ll get what’s coming, reckless man!"

The same goes for this one:

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