[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for iLupinus[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]Peter Pan[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Peter Pan

Author: iLupinus

Main Characters: Luhan and (Minseon)Fem!Xiumin

Genre: Angst, Romance

Status: Completed

Description of Story: Minseon has fought more than her fair share of pirates, and she's barely holding on. A meeting with an eternal child gives her the strength to keep going.

 

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 2.5/5

The title wasn't unique. A good experiment I do is searching your story title in Google. A lot of stories popped out with the same title as yours. The bad thing about this is that your readers may have a hard time differentiating your story with the others. They might think that the story is cliche since your title is common. The good side though is that it may attract attention, since EXO is pretty popular, and Peter Pan is one of their songs. The title was very relevant to the story as well which is good. I have to say though, the title did not attract my attention at all.

 

Graphics: 0/0

Since you admitted to having problems with your poster, I will not include this section in the grading system. I suggest getting one ASAP though, and a background matching the poster since your readers won't see your poster all the time, neh? Besides, it'll add more effects.

I see that you created your own poster, yes? Well, first of all, it was definitely not attracting. Most readers tend to base on the graphics whether to continue reading or not. First of all, it would have been better if you used an actual person on the poster, which is "Minseon" and Luhan.

It was also one of your additional request for me to recommend some good graphic shops. Here are some I'd like to recommend (Click the links):

~> 暗 Dark-- ♥-- Heart 心脏 ♥--Graphics 海报店 ~> ༺ B A B Y's K I S S ༻ Postershop | OPEN | HIRING |  ~> Forbidden Labyrinth Graphic Shop | OPEN! | HIRING  ~> C'est La Vie ∞ Graphic & Trailer Shop ➾ OPEN

~> Eminent ◯ a graphic shop /is OPEN/

 

Description and Foreword: 9/10

You description was fine. It was short and simple, yet you gave the necessary information a description must have, so good job. The shortness is understandable too since it is a oneshot.... right? You might want to include it in your tags too, and mark it as a oneshot as well... if it is, anyway. ^^

 

Characterization: 6.5/10

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