"Sleeping Dogs Lie"

Author: HKG2310

Main Characters: Luna, Zico, Yongguk

Genre: Angst, Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance

Status: Completed

Description of Story:
Sunyoung, commonly known as "Luna" by friends and family, is the younger sister of Yongguk. Their involvement in the HSS Mob means they're constantly looking over their shoulders. After the death of their parents at the hands of the Ssang-Yong-Pa gang at the turn of the century, they were taken in by sympathetic rival gang members. When Luna unwittingly sleeps with Zico from another rival gang, the Seven Star Mob, and wants to see him more, she quickly finds herself in a difficult position.

Story Title: 3/5

Okay, my first impression about your title is… what is this story about? I don’t know why, the title seems doesn’t really attract me to read your story. Your story title somehow looks doesn’t matching with your description, and also the story plot. It also looks doesn’t really relevant to your story. 

I think you should pick a title that can go well with your story, resembles the gangs genre that I think is the main attraction of your fic. The title that will make people want to know what kind of story did they just found, makes them eager to read your fic. I know you have quite a lot of subscribers, but if you pick another interesting title that match with your story plot, I am really certain that more readers will subscribe to your story.

Graphics: 6/10

Well, the poster is beautiful. Luna’s face expression is just great, she looks cold. Just, I don’t think the poster is angsty enough, maybe because of the color scheme? Yellow in my opinion, doesn’t goes well with this kind of story. Black and red or grey are the most suitable color scheme for your poster, because it can resembles the gangs and angst feel.

I also think you should add Yongguk and Zico into that poster too since they’re the main too. The poster looks empty with just Luna alone in it. Zico and Yongguk, well I believed, can make the poster looks great. You also can add some kind of gangster stuff into the background such as bombs, guns or the gangs name. That will do!

I know maybe you think the poster can’t effect your story but believe in me, poster somehow can attract the readers although the story is not really great, I’ve experienced this.

Description and Foreword: 7/10

I don’t have any problem with your description. The description is okay, because it doesn’t reveal the whole story or plot or something like that. I hate it when some writers, reveals the whole story in their description or foreword, it’s irritating. The description makes the readers wonder what this story is about, what is going to