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[CONTENTID2]Totally Cliche... Or Is It?[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Totally Cliche... Or Is It?

Author: Nhoxmew

Main Characters: Eunhye (OC), Jaekyung (OC), Infinite's L, Hoya and Sunggyu

Genre: Angst, Drama, Romance

Status: On-going

Description of Story: As two girls involuntarily get caught in an idol group's interest, things got really messy the moment love began to take its toll. However, when secrets are unveiled, will Infinite's life ever be the same again? ---- 'Just Another Cliché Love Story...' But. 'They're not who they claimed to be...'

 

 

 

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 3/5

Your title did spark my interest and it's unique and original which is DAEBAK ~ Honestly even if your title did spark my intrerest and it was unique ect ect, If I wasn't requested to review this, I don't think I would've seen it, in the world of AFF. Mainly because of the 'or is it?' part because right away you know there's something happening, but sometimes people aren't intereste when they know right away there's going to be a twist. I think you should do "Cliche, Is It Now?" or something that still kind of relates to the title you have now. Still it's a good title, just that it gives abit of the plot away quickly. The thing is you've re-worded it differently from other stories but it still has the same meaning such as;
-Not So Cliche After All
-Almost Cliche
-Not So Cliche
-Cliche with a Twist
See? They all have Cliche in it, which is the main/big word in your title. ^^ One thing alot of the reviewers here do is to check you title ideas on the search section, to see if your titles are unique and original ^^

 

Graphics: 0/0

You currently have no poster, and since we have talked alot, you told me that you do have one coming through (sounds like your gonna give birth XD) Anyway, since you do have one that's currently getting done, I can't really propose any poster ideas or background ones, so I think I'll skip this one. ^^;

 

Description and Foreword: 5/10

Your description was short, and I could see you didn't want to give too much away but I think you should've wrote abit more,there are people who are kind of like you who don't want to give out the whole story plot on their description but they have more than 2 lines, and they can still catch the interest of the readers. For yours, it was okay but I think you should've changed how you laid it out;
Original:
As two girls involuntarily get caught in an idol group's interest, things got really messy the moment love began to take its toll. However, when secrets are unveiled, will Infinite's life ever be the same again? 
Edit:
Two girls, involuntarily get caught in an idol group's interest. Things get really messy, the moment love began to take it's toll. However, when secrets are unveiled. Will Infinite's life ever be the same again?
There aren't many changes but personally when you added in the question, it should be in a sentence by itself as it creates more of an angst feel, even if it's little ^^
For your Character Chart/List, I think you should've putten "Character List" in the middle as people tend to see it more, than into the side. For your femele OC characters, they are alittle realistic but I think it's a tiny mary-sue like. Both have a secret that they most hid, but isn't that over-used? I don't think you should've really put in their personalities as it would be better to develope them into the story little by little instead of forcing the readers to know about them straight away. For the femele characters again, you didn't put a picture which is fine, but in some cases like yours, you have a picture for the infinite's members which is kinda mean. You don't really need to find an idol's picture, a nice ulzzang one will do the trick XD ^^ Unless your waiting for the poster models, and wanting them to be similar then please remember to get a picture for both of them ^^

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For your foreword, I didn't quite understand who was talking, and I know you wanted people to be curious and stuff but I was just confused. That was it, confusion took over my mind. I did like how you had 'suspicion', 'responsibility' ect ect, but I got confused at the dialogs. Some of them make sense, and the other ones, I got confused such as;
“Have you been lying to us all this time?”
“You will do as I say from now on,or she will disappear from this Earth.”
?? Those were for the conflicts, I didn't really think they 'complemented' eachother for this. 
But the rest were pretty much fine ^^
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