[CONTENTID1]Archive: Review for OhSeYeon[/CONTENTID1]

[CONTENTID2]Simple Dimple Lays[/CONTENTID2]

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Story Title: Simple Dimple Lays

Author: OhSeYeon

Main Characters: Lay, Hyeona (OC)

Genre: Friendship

Status: Completed

Description of Story: Lay has a crush on his best friend since born, Hyeona~

CRITIQUE:

Story Title: 4/5

Your title is unique: 'Simple Dimple Lays" but it's kind of weird. Maybe you could have wrote 'The Simple Dimpled Lay', or something but to me the title still feels weird. 

Graphics: 0/0

There were no posters or backgrounds but seeing you just made it one day ago, it's alright. For you poster I would suggest something that wasn't 'soft' like, I think bright and cute would look nice, since your story isn't angst like at all ^^

Description and Foreword: 5.5/10

I think it gives out the story plan, 'come up to the rooftop', darling there's already alot of fanfics with the same dialog (?) It's either come up to the rooftop or come here after school, to common. I don't want to really suggest anything because I