"The Tale Keeper: Last Romeo"

Author: infinitize_it

Main Characters: Sunggyu (Infinite)

Genre: Alternate Universe, Fantasy/Supernatural, Romance, Tragedy,

Status: On-going

Description of Story:
Would you choose to die when your true love not reached?
Or you could only hug your knees, break down in tears, hide in the comfort of your room like a little kid who didn't get a candy?
Kim Sunggyu was chosen by the tale keeper to engrave a story to forget his sweetheart. Chosen to carve a story about burying the hatchet of the past. He must resolved the tart bitter of his journey --in any price. Because everyone really in need of this tale, to understand the real meaning of broken-hearted. To fathom the true meaning of loss.
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"Will you die for me?" Woohyun asked in low voice...

Story Title: 4/5

A title is a story’s first impression. People make a first impression with appearance, wardrobe and body language. Stories do it with a title, that's why titles are extremely important. A title creates anticipation and expectation or, perhaps, disinterest. Often the title is what will determine whether or not someone reads a story. Remember that titles have always been important. Everyone knows that. The problem is deciding just what constitutes a 'good' title – keeping in mind that fashions for titles change at least as frequently as fashion for shoes. Furthermore, a good title must fulfill multiple functions. It must have some relationship to the content of the story it designates. It must be notable, comparatively unique, attractive to potential readers, and nowadays, it must also work-well for on-line search engines. A good title makes all the difference in the world. It can be the difference between having your post widely read and shared across the internet and only getting a small amount of traction. The main purpose of a title is to garner attention and entice people to start reading your post. This is why the words that you use and how your craft your title is vital to the success of your story.

In your case, well I did find it unique. I haven't really read a story with that kind of title as yours, and maybe that's a good thing. As for the relevance, well it was indeed relevant to your story. At first glance. I could already tell that it was of adventure because of the word 'tale', and entirety of tale keeper gave the supernatural or fantasy genre out. The 'Last Romeo' gave off the romantic feel as well since we all know Romeo. I personally think that the title suits your story. I mean, it already encapsulated all the genres. On the other hand, I think you did a good job with adding the 'Last Romeo'. It'd be great start if you want this story to become a series since you can simply change the words after the colon. My only issue would be the slight questionable grammatical mistake. I think it should be appropriate to put an article, 'the', before the word 'last'. It sounds a bit weird to state 'Last Romeo' without an article starting the phrase. But then again, it would sound a bit redundant I guess since you already had the article 'the' at the beginning of the title? But nonetheless, it's your choice. I mean, this is just my opinion anyways. Other than that, I still haven't grasped the true meaning of the 'Last Romeo'. I presume it's Sunggyu? Still, I haven't incorporated that title yet.

Graphics: 5.5/10

I'll be a bit too honest at this section. I don't exactly fancy your poster, although I kind of admire you for using that kind of poster. I mean, did you draw it yourself? Because if you did, then I really really admire you. I also admire you for using a complementing background. On the other hand, here are some of my concerns. First of all, the drawing was too blurry. If you really did draw the poster, then I think it would've been better if you sharpened the shading for Woohyun and Sunggyu since their features weren't that visible. For instance, the ship at the back was shaded darker than the characters when they were the ones closer in sight. It should be the opposite. They really look like the actual Woohyun and Sunggyu though, which is amazing since most sketched I've seen so far had a some indifferences. Also, the poster came out too blurry for me. I do understand that the setting and time of the story was set from way back, but still, the blurred parts was not that appealing. Only 'Last Romeo' was put on the poster as well. 'The Tale Keeper' should be included. I think it's more important than the latter to be honest.

Moreover, seeing that the rest of the elements of the poster were blurry whereas the title was too evident made it a bit weird. It would've been better if the title looked like it was a bit blurry as well, but not too blurry though. The poster would've looked better if there were slight rips at the sides, making it seem like it was really that of the past, making it look old. As for the background, well it's fine I guess. It's just that it wasn't really a patterned one, wherein it's a bit distracting to scroll down since some parts were brighter and some parts were darker than the other parts, so it came out weird when the ends touched each other. But I guess it's fine. All in all, I don't really fancy you poster. I do think it's best to request to a graphics shop, although it's your decision to be honest. I mean, these sentences above were just based on my opinion. Nonetheless, if you're thinking of requesting, then I guess my words would be of help? Again, it's your decision. Oh, and don't forget to ask for a complementing background while you're at it.

Description and Foreword: 4.5/10

Descriptions and forewords are important factors since you are mainly marketing/attracting your potential readers into reading your story. A description is your chance to speak directly to your readers about why you wrote the story, what it’s about, and why it’s important. As it is an introduction to your story, a description should include information about the plot. For instance, you should give a brief description of the story; the main characters, or themes. In your case, well you did give off the main character which is Sunggyu, which is a better way to be honest since giving Woohyun off would ruin the surprise, although we all know that the both of them are in the story. You also gave off the right information, whereas you frankly introduced the story without supplying any twists at all. It doesn't exactly sound appealing to me though. I mean, I really thought that you'd focus on the adventure thingy, but it turns out that the story will revolve on Sunggyu trying to move on from his past. Nonetheless, I expected a lot from your story. The description sounded good to be honest, especially the last part wherein you'll be conveying the true meaning of loss through the story. I was mainly attracted to that line to be honest. Good job.

(Original Version) Would you choose to die when your true love not reached? Or you could only hug your knees, break down in tears, hide in the comfort of your room like a little kid who didn't get a candy? Kim Sunggyu was chosen by the tale keeper to engrave a story to forget his sweetheart. Chosen to carve a story about burying the hatchet of the past. He must resolved the tart bitter of his journey --in any price. Because everyone really in need of this tale, to understand the real meaning of broken-hearted. To fathom the true meaning of loss.
"Will you die for me?" Woohyun asked in low voice...

(Revised Version) Would you choose to die once your true love was not reached? Or would you hug your knees, break down in tears, and hide in the comfort of your room like a little kid who didn't get a candy? Kim Sunggyu was chosen by the tale keeper to engrave a story in order to forget his sweetheart. Chosen to carve a story of burying the hatchet of the past, he must resolve his tart and bitter journey -- at any price. Why? Because everyone, who are in need of this tale, has to understand the real meaning of being broken-hearted; to fathom the true meaning of loss.
"Would you die for me?"

~> Okay, so for this one, well I might have revised some words. First of all, you really need to study more about commas. There were a lot of errors regarding that, wherein you tend to continue a sentence without using any commas when they're needed. Your tenses were messed up as well. There were also some phrases you considered as sentences. Your prepositions were messed up as well, as well as punctuation marks. I corrected most of them though as illustrated above. Before the sentence you started with 'because', I added a short question of 'why?' because it would seem like you're directly talking at someone, which is evident from how you started the description, and that it sounds more appealing, don't you think? As for Woohyun's dialogue, I changed 'will' to 'would'. Why? Well, if you use 'will', it's like Sunggyu's going to do what Woohyun's asks, where as if you use 'would', you're implying something more conditional, and doesn't seem complete by itself. Either way is correct, but it's actually based on what you want to imply. I mean, if you use 'will', it's like Woohyun's asking him without any condition, whereas it sounds too straight-forward. On the other hand, using 'would' would make it seem like he's asking him softly, as if he was contemplating or something. It's your decision though.

As for the foreword, well it was the