KyElMa - A Wolf's Beauty
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At first I thought the title was too obvious and blunt, but as I read on I realize that it could have been interpreted as "the beauty of the wolf" but then it was actually The wolf's beauty. That was a great twist for me and so I gave you full mark. It definitely takes more than just your story title alone to be able to predict or know anything about the story.
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Character: (8/10)
Honestly I hate 'you' stories, just because it feels weird to read it and it's hard to imagine it being 'me'. It doesn't have anything to do with whether I like the groups or not, because even if it was my biased group, the moment I saw 'you' I would have left the fiction. Just because most of the 'you' fics out there aren't exactly my cup of tea. Anyway, I must admit that this was quite an enjoyable read despite this kind of POV.
First and foremost the main character is 'you', thus doesn't have a name. Her character is something strange to me, I can't tell what she really wants and doesn't want. Like does she like living there but is pretending to deny the welcome of the strangers (it seems like she actually likes it there). Also she fit right in too perfectly from the start that it gave me chills. For example she was quick to judge, demand, and order SIX men around (when she basically ordered them to let her go).
Otherwise I think Kai's character is pretty stable, he's quite emotional and kind plus he's not the cliche 'best fighter'/'coolest wolf'/'most popular boy' in the group. This is where all of EXO-K comes in and they all have their own presence and character in the story, making the story more insteresting.
Usually having too many characters will bore readers, especially if the author isn't organized with the character's personalities, appearances, mindset, and background history. But in this case everyone did stand out in their own way so kudos here. Besides the story is just starting so I'm sure there will be more information added to each character's profile.
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Originality: (8/10)
EXO being werewolves and one of the member falling for a human female is no surprise, but you were able to twist this trend and made it your own. The idea of her moving in without much objection towards the idea is a bit cliche. (I mean if she really didn't want to stay with them then maybe she could have starved herself, attempts more runsaway, etc, but that's just my idea of a woman against staying with strangers). Anyway the idea of a wolf's 'beauty' reminds me of TWILIGHT with the wolves and their mark thingy, but anyway good job here as well.
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Story-line/Plot: (37/40)
The storyline over all moved too fast, especially with the character's decisions etc. Plus it's confusing when there are flashbacks and whatnot, especially for EXO-Ms cuts. But for readers who may enjoy more romance between Kai and the OC may have liked the flow of the story just fine, in fact it may have been even slower to them. But either way this idea of a wolf gaining or finding his true power through his true beauty is quite a plot. I don't think there's much to say anymore other than saying that this story has potential and I can see a great plot and even major twist behind it.
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Grammar/Errors: (24/25)
English was marked as your first language and I didn't doubt it. The only thing I suggest is re-reading some of your latest chapters, they tend to have more errors than the previous. In terms of misplaced and misused words. Anyway I was thinking of pointing everything out but I figure you'll be able to catch them if you proofread. If not then feel free to let me know and I'll help point them out.
Original: "Alright, what's up this dude?...."
Correction: "Alright, what's up with this dude?"
Suggestion: I guess it's quite obvious what's wrong here and a common error.
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Overall Enjoyment: (3.5/5)
Though I'm not a huge EXO fan, I could easily spot the EXO references you have inputed into the story to stir some laughs, and it worked. Other than it being another EXO story of them being wolves, I was glad to be given a chance to read this story as I read for the storyline and not always the idols or cast. It was is an enjoyable story and I would suggest it to any readers who are fans of EXO and also sweet/fluffy romance~
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Total Score (90.5/100)
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Bonus: *Your questions and focuses for me*
Sorry for the three days wait, usually I'll be able to get stories under 16 chapters down and done fairly quickly but some personal things came up. Anyway hopefully this review was to your satisfaction.
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