Allegro: Young Blood and Electric Blue Skies

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REQUEST ON: 5/17/15
REVIEWER: BLACKROSESTEARS
FINISHED ON: 7/29/15
SCORE: 98/100
TITLE: (10/10)
LOGICAL (3/3) - IN MY OPINION, THE TITLE FITS THE STORY VERY WELL AND IT WAS NICE TO READ. IT SOUNDS LIKE A TITLE WITH A SPECIAL MEANING BEHIND IT SO YOU WANT TO READ THE STORY. 
EYE-CATCHING (3/3) - IT WAS REALLY INTERESTING TO READ BECAUSE OF WHAT I WROTE ABOVE ABOUT YOUR TITLE. IT CAUGHT MY INTEREST FROM THE START AND MADE ME WONDER ABOUT THE PLOT.
ORIGINAL (4/4) - IT IS A REALLY ORIGINAL TITLE, I DIDN'T FIND STORIES WITH THE SAME OR A SIMILAR TITLE WHICH MADE THE TITLE EVEN BETTER. 
 
STORY'S FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION (10/10)
STORY'S SUMMARY (5/5) - IT SOUNDED REALLY INTERESTING AND DOESN'T REVEAL TOO MUCH. IT IS JUST ENOUGH TO CATCH THE INTEREST OF THE READER THAT THEY REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHAT EXACTLY HAPPENS IN THE STORY. YOUR CHARACTERS SOUND INTERESTING AND SO I COULDN'T WAIT TO GET TO KNOW THEM.
APPEARANCE (5/5) - IT IS REALLY NEAT AND GOOD TO READ SO THERE IS NOTHING TO SAY HERE. 
 
CHARACTERS/CASTS (10/10)
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT (5/5) - I REALLY LIKED HOW YOUR CHARACTERS CHANGED OVER THE STORY FOR DIFFERENT REASONS AND IN A NATURAL WAY, NOT SUDDENLY BEING SOMEONE TOTALLY DIFFERENT. YOU MADE IT SEEM REALLY NATURAL. 
FOR WONWOO HE SEEMS TO BE A PRETTY SMART GUY WITH A LIFE THAT IS NOT ALWAYS EASY BECAUSE OF HIS FAMILY AND FRIENDS, HE PARTIES A LOT WITH HIS FRIENDS AND HAS A LOT OF DIFFERENT GIRLS WITHOUT REALLY HAVING FEELINGS FOR THEM.  BUT THEN THERE IS SEULGI WHO IS ABLE TO GRAB WONWOO'S INTEREST AND IT SEEMS LIKE SHE IS ABLE TO CHANGE HIM SLOWLY WITH THE STORY PASSING BY. I REALLY LIKED THAT BECAUSE I REALLY LIKE TO BELIEVE THAT PEOPLE CAN CHANGE THROUGH OTHERS AND THOSE TWO ARE THE PERFECT EXAMPLE.
CHARACTER'S RELATIONS (5/5) - THE INTERACTIONS BETWEEN YOUR CHARACTERS WERE REALLY REALISTIC. THEY ALL PLAYED AN IMPORTANT IN THE STORY AND YOU WERE ABLE TO SHOW THAT REALLY WELL, EVEN IF THEY WERE NOT THE MAIN CHARACTER, EVERY SINGLE CHARACTER WAS ABLE TO SHINE PROPERLY.
 
THE AUTHOR'S MINDSET (38/40)
LOGICALLY (10/10) - OVER THE CHAPTERS THERE WAS NEVER REALLY A POINT I WAS UNSURE OR CONFUSED ABOUT THE PLOT. IT ALL MADE SENSE TO ME. 
ORIGINALITY (8/10) - I LIKE YOUR PLOT AND WHAT IT WANTS TO TELL THE READER BUT AT THE SAME TIME, I DON'T REALLY THINK THAT IT IS SOMETHING NEW. 
TONE (5/5) - THE TONE WAS REALLY GOOD OVER THE WHOLE STORY AND FITTED THE SITUATIONS INSTEAD OF TRYING TO SHOW SOMETHING DIFFERENT FROM THE PLOT. 
NARRATION (5/5) - THE POV IS WELL USED, MAKES SENSE AND IS NOT CONFUSING. IT ALSO HELPED REALLY GOOD TO FEEL A CONNECTION TO YOUR CHARACTERS AND TO UNDERSTAND THE WAY THEY ARE ACTING. 
STORYLINE (10/10) - YOUR PLOT WAS REALLY INTERESTING AND GOOD TO READ. YOUR WRITING STYLE IS PRETTY NICE AND MAKES YOU KEEP ON READING FROM THE BEGINNING TO THE END. IT IS A STORY THAT MANY PEOPLE ESPECIALLY TEENAGER CAN RELATE TO BECAUSE WONWOO IS LIKE ONE OF THEM STRUGGLING WITH HIS LIFE AND WITH LOVE. THOUGH AS I MENTIONED ABOVE THE PLOT IS NOT REALLY SOMETHING NEW, YOU WERE STILL ABLE TO GIVE IT YOUR OWN TOUCH THAT SHOWED FROM THE VERY START THAT YOUR STORY IS DIFFERENT FROM OTHERS AND WORTH READING IT.  THE FLOW OF THE STORY IS GOOD THE WAY IT IS, NOT TOO FAST NOR TOO SLOW BUT REALLY SMOOTH AND EASY TO FOLLOW. THERE WERE NO CONFUSING PARTS OR JUMPS FROM ONE SITUATION INTO ANOTHER ONE BUT INSTEAD YOU TOOK YOUR TIME TO EXPLAIN AND MAKE THE READER FEEL A CONNECTION NOT ONLY TO THE STORY BUT ALSO TO YOUR CHARACTERS. 
 
PROPER USE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE (25/25)
PROPER GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION (10/10) - YOUR GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION WERE GOOD, THERE WERE NO MAJOR MISTAKES THAT COULD BE DISTURBING WHILE READING THE STORY. 
TERMINOLOGY (5/5) - YOUR VOCABULARY WAS ALSO REALLY GOOD BECAUSE THERE WAS NO OVERUSE OF ANY WORDS OR PHRASES. YOU USED YOUR WORDS PRETTY WELL THAT WHILE READING THE STORY IT WAS LIKE YOU COULD SEE THAT YOU WERE THINKING ABOUT HOW TO WRITE IT. 
LANGUAGE BARRIER (10/10) - THERE WAS NO OVERUSE OF KOREAN OR ANY OTHER LANGUAGE. 
 
REVIEWER'S ENJOYMENT (5/5)
OVERALL, I ENJOYED READING YOUR STORY. THE PLOT IS INTERESTING AND I REALLY LOVE THIS KIND OF STORIES THAT COULD ALSO HELP SOMEONE WHO RELATES TO THE PLOT. YOUR CHARACTERS WERE REALLY GOOD AND THERE IS NOT REALLY SOMETHING TO SAY AGAINST YOUR STORY. SO REALLY GOOD JOB HERE. 
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WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#1
One more thing. I know the Description and the forward are super long. But I planned this story to be like a Novella/Soap Opera.
It may seem like I'm giving away to much in the Description and The Forward, but as you realize you might notice that I haven't.
There are three main parts to this story:
The Past-Childhood
The Past- Orphans/Teens
The Present- The main setting, in which the forward revealed nothing.

I'm an interactive author, meaning I ask questions at the end and leave hints here and there for the readers to try there best at guessing. (They become more invested in my story this way, lol)
WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#2
-Username : WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
-Profile link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/49463

- Story title : Love Me Right
- Story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/976222/love-me-right-mpreg-hunhan-taoris-kaisoo-sulay-chanbaek-chenmin

-Genre : OT12, Angst, Mpreg, Fluff, Comedy, Growth, Friendship, Life, and "LEARNING TO LOVE"

- On-going | To be a long fic.

- Reviewer : KaihleeLo

- So The title of the fic is "Love Me Right", but it has nothing to do with the EXO song; even though some would just assume. The reason why I titled it 'Love Me Right' is because 6 of the main characters suffered in their childhood and eventually were orphaned. They don't know how to let themselves love. In particular, Luhan. As for the other 6 'Love' and 'Lust' are two different things.

- So before you read, I would like to point out, that the pacing of the story and the built up is exactly how I planned. I don't want to rush Romance because you don't 'fall in love' over night, and the characters need to mature. Also, there is a pattern to my chapters "The Past" chapters are essentially flashbacks. "The Present" is taking place now. For every 5 "The Present" chapters, it will be followed by 2 "The Past" chapters; Childhood/Teen years.

- I have a reader who offered to proofread my chapters since I had some typos, and I don't have the time to go back and fix them. "I always update between 12 am - 5 am, so that is the main reason". She is still editing the earlier chapters so please realize I am fixing the errors.


Oh gosh this was a lot. I'm sorry. I'm just really nervous, and I wanted to explain the above before you review.
-Tigress-
#3
Chapter 127: Hey can I have someone send me my review here so I can save it?
This archive is non-selectable so I can't save it myself.