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Author: btfulorelore
Reviewed By: -Vminatic

Requested Date: 1/12/17

Review Completion: 1/27/17
Story Link: Link
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Story, plot, etc

Title: 9/10

Logical: 3/3

I could see where the title was coming from. The story involves violence and guns and thus, "shot". Then, it involves romance and I think your title is very smart. 
Eye-catching: 2/3
It was unique and it did catch my attention.  
Original: 4/4
It is a unique title which I have hardly seen before.

Description/Foreword: 9/10

Summary: 5/5

Your description left me entirely hooked. It really urged me to read on and press the "next" button.
Appearance: 4/5
Overall, the appearance is very neat. However, I would like if you could change all the fonts (including your chapters) to the same because it's very distracting for me.

Character Development/Showcasing: 8/10

Development: 3/5

Since the story has just begun, there wasn't much character development. However, I believe that you would definitely do well with character development in the future as a plot like yours is easy to develop characters.
Relation/Cast: 5/5
I could see how you related the characters with the different ships and I really like the way you make them connect. Like Chanyeol is supposed to focus on Baekhyung, Kyungsoo and Kai and Sehun and Luhan. It's really nice to see my ships all in one too!

Behind the Author's Mind: 36/40

Logical: 10/10

I could see where the story was going. Starting off with taking a slight peek into Chanyeol's daily routin/character, then proceeding on to the main mission which leads to the rest of the plot. The way you connected the events reminded me of one of my stories which I'm currently writing on draft.
Original: 8/10
I felt that it was really original as I hardly see plots like these. I am a fan of betrayal and spies (WHICH IS EXACTLY THE STORY I WAS REFERRING TO LOL). Which was why I really, really enjoyed your plot.
Tone: 5/5
The tone was always fitting with the atmosphere.

Naration: 4/5

The narration was great overall. You were able to describe the action scene well. I think with upcoming fighting scenes, you would be able to write them well.
Storyline: 9/10
Your storyline was very interesting and I was really happy reading it, as I said before, it reminded me of my story.

Proper Use of the English Language: 24/25

Proper Grammar/Punctuation: 9/10

Overall, your grammar was really well done. I did not see much mistakes and if there were mistakes, it did not affect my mood and the flow of the story.

Termonology: 5/5
Your vocabulary range wasn't very extended, neither was it very narrow and i really like that. I do not like reading stories with extended vocabulary because it affects the flow of the story and my mood as I'm trying to figure out the  meaning on the word.
Language Barrier: 10/10
There was little use, if not no use at all, of Korean or other languages.

General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 5/5
Overall, I really enjoyed reading your story! It was really nice reading a story which is similiar to mine! :D

Total points: 91/100