Six Deadly Sins - bapbangme

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BAPBANGME
REQUEST ON: 5/7/16
REVIEWER: BLACKROSESTEARS
FINISHED ON: 5/11/16

 

SCORE: 100/100
TITLE: (10/10)
LOGICAL (3/3) - I CAN TOTALLY UNDERSTAND WHY YOU CHOSE THIS TITLE AND IT FITS THE STORY AND ITS PLOT REALLY WELL. 
EYE-CATCHING (3/3) - THE TITLE CAUGHT MY INTEREST RIGHT AWAY, IT SOUNDS REALLY INTERESTING AND IT SOUNDS LIKE A PRETTY DARK STORY WHICH IS SOMETHING I REALLY LIKE. THE TITLE IS REALLY GOOD BECAUSE IT GIVES YOU SPACE TO THINK ABOUT POSSIBILITIES OF WHAT WILL HAPPEN IN THE STORY WHICH IS ANOTHER THING I REALLY LIKE. 
ORIGINAL (4/4) - THERE ARE NO OTHER STORIES WITH A SIMILAR OR THE SAME TITLE WHICH GIVES THE STORY A FRESH VIBE AND JUST MAKES IT EVEN BETTER. 
 
STORY'S FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION (10/10)
STORY'S SUMMARY (5/5) - IT IS A PRETTY NICE SUMMARY OF THE PLOT WHICH ALREADY SHOWS THAT THE PLOT ITSELF IS UNIQUE. IT SOUNDS REALLY INTERESTING AND DOESN'T REVEAL TOO MUCH OF THE ACTUAL PLOT AND INSTEAD RAISES THE CURIOSITY OF THE READER. 
APPEARANCE (5/5) - THE STRUCTURE IS ALSO REALLY GOOD, EVERYTHING IS EASY TO READ AND TO UNDERSTAND. IT DOESN'T LOOK MESSY AT ALL. 
 
CHARACTERS/CASTS (10/10)
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT (5/5) - SO FAR IT IS HARD TO SAY MUCH ABOUT THE DEVELOPMENT OF YOUR CHARACTERS BUT SO FAR THEY ARE WELL PORTRAIT. I REALLY LIKE HOW THEY ALL HAVE THIS EVIL VIBE ON THEM AND NOT SUDDENLY ARE NICE AND WANT TO HELP HUMANS BECAUSE THEY LIKE THEM BUT JUST TO GAIN THEIR OWN PROFIT FROM IT, IT.
CHARACTER'S RELATIONS (5/5) - THEIR RELATIONSHIP ARE MOSTLY NOT REVEALED SO FAR BUT THOSE WHO ARE REVEAL ARE REALLY INTERESTING AND INTENSE. FOR EXAMPLE BAEKHYUN AND KRIS ARE KIND OF FLIRTING WITH EACH OTHER BUT STILL DON'T GO FURTHER, YOU CAN FEEL THE TENSION BETWEEN THEM.
 
THE AUTHOR'S MINDSET (40/40)
LOGICALLY (10/10) - SO FAR EVERYTHING MADE SENSE AND THERE WERE NO TIMES IT GOT CONFUSION. 
ORIGINALITY (10/10) - WHEN I READ THE FOREWORD, I ALREADY THOUGHT THAT IT WOULD BE AN ORIGINAL PLOT AND NOW THAT I STARTED READING THE STORY, I AM PRETTY CONVINCED. 
TONE (5/5) - AS I ALREADY MENTIONED ABOVE, YOU WERE ALWAYS ABLE TO CAPTURE THE MOOD OF YOUR SCENES AND THE TENSION WHENEVER THERE WAS SOME. IT ALWAYS FITTED PRETTY GOOD THE SCENES. 
NARRATION (5/5) -THE POVS ARE WELL USED, YOU DON'T CHANGE THEM OUT OF NOWHERE AND STICK TO THEM ONCE YOU BEGAN WITH ONE. LIKE THAT WE ARE ABLE TO SEE NOT ONLY WHAT THE DEMONS ARE THINKING BUT ALSO THE HUMANS WHICH IS PRETTY INTERESTING AND WILL BE EVEN MORE INTERESTING IN THE FUTURE CHAPTERS. 
STORYLINE (10/10) - THE BEGINNING IS REALLY GOOD WITH BAEKHYUN BEING BORED SO HE MADE THE PROPOSAL TO GO TO EARTH AND PLAY. THE OTHERS ARE NOT REALLY INTERESTED IN IT AND DON'T GO WITH HIM OR AT LEAST IT LOOKS LIKE THAT. BECAUSE WHEN BAEKHYUN WANTS TO HELP CHANYEOL, HE MEETS KRIS AGAIN. I REALLY LIKED THAT PART BECAUSE IT WAS FUNNY IN A WAY BECAUSE OF HOW THEY ACTED EARLIER IN THE STORY BUT STILL WENT TO EARTH. 
SO FAR THE STORY IS REALLY GOOD. IT IS NICE TO READ, YOUR WRITING STYLE IS ADDICTING AND THE PLOT IS REALLY INTERESTING. I REALLY LIKE HOW THE PAIRINGS ALL HAVE A DIFFERENT STORY THAT FITS THE DEMONS AND THEIR SPECIALIST FIELD. THE FLOW IS ALSO REALLY GOOD, SO FAR NOT TOO FAST.
 
PROPER USE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE (25/25)
PROPER GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION (10/10) - YOUR GRAMMAR IS REALLY GOOD, I DIDN'T FIND ANY DISTURBING MISTAKES WHILE READING SO GOOD JOB.
TERMINOLOGY (5/5) - THERE WERE NO WORDS OR PHRASES THAT WERE OVERUSED SO THERE IS NOTHING TO WRITE HERE TOO. 
LANGUAGE BARRIER (10/10) - THERE WAS ALSO OVERUSE OF THE KOREAN OR ANY OTHER LANGUAGE. 
 
REVIEWER'S ENJOYMENT (5/5)
OVERALL I REALLY ENJOYED READING YOUR STORY BECAUSE I LIKE YOUR WRITING STYLE AND THESE TYPE OF PLOTS TOO SO I THINK I WILL CONTINUE TO READ YOUR STORY. 
I HOPE THIS REVIEW IS STILL HELPFUL IN A WAY. 
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WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#1
One more thing. I know the Description and the forward are super long. But I planned this story to be like a Novella/Soap Opera.
It may seem like I'm giving away to much in the Description and The Forward, but as you realize you might notice that I haven't.
There are three main parts to this story:
The Past-Childhood
The Past- Orphans/Teens
The Present- The main setting, in which the forward revealed nothing.

I'm an interactive author, meaning I ask questions at the end and leave hints here and there for the readers to try there best at guessing. (They become more invested in my story this way, lol)
WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#2
-Username : WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
-Profile link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/49463

- Story title : Love Me Right
- Story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/976222/love-me-right-mpreg-hunhan-taoris-kaisoo-sulay-chanbaek-chenmin

-Genre : OT12, Angst, Mpreg, Fluff, Comedy, Growth, Friendship, Life, and "LEARNING TO LOVE"

- On-going | To be a long fic.

- Reviewer : KaihleeLo

- So The title of the fic is "Love Me Right", but it has nothing to do with the EXO song; even though some would just assume. The reason why I titled it 'Love Me Right' is because 6 of the main characters suffered in their childhood and eventually were orphaned. They don't know how to let themselves love. In particular, Luhan. As for the other 6 'Love' and 'Lust' are two different things.

- So before you read, I would like to point out, that the pacing of the story and the built up is exactly how I planned. I don't want to rush Romance because you don't 'fall in love' over night, and the characters need to mature. Also, there is a pattern to my chapters "The Past" chapters are essentially flashbacks. "The Present" is taking place now. For every 5 "The Present" chapters, it will be followed by 2 "The Past" chapters; Childhood/Teen years.

- I have a reader who offered to proofread my chapters since I had some typos, and I don't have the time to go back and fix them. "I always update between 12 am - 5 am, so that is the main reason". She is still editing the earlier chapters so please realize I am fixing the errors.


Oh gosh this was a lot. I'm sorry. I'm just really nervous, and I wanted to explain the above before you review.
-Tigress-
#3
Chapter 127: Hey can I have someone send me my review here so I can save it?
This archive is non-selectable so I can't save it myself.