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REQUEST ON: 12/31/15
REVIEWER: BLACKROSESTEARS
FINISHED ON: 3/21/16
SCORE: 97/100
TITLE: (8/10)
LOGICAL (3/3) - THE TITLE MAKES TOTALLY SENSE TOGETHER WITH THE PLOT AND READER ARE ABLE TO UNDERSTAND WHY YOU CHOSE IT AS THE TITLE TOO.
EYE-CATCHING (2/3) - IT WAS NOT REALLY EYE-CATCHING TO ME BECAUSE IT REVEALS A BIG PART OF THE PLOT AND SOUNDED NOT REALLY SPECIAL THAT MADE ME WANTING TO READ THE STORY RIGHT AWAY.
ORIGINAL (3/4) - THERE ARE SOME OTHERS STORIES WITH A SIMILAR TITLE BUT NOT TOO MANY.
STORY'S FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION (10/10)
STORY'S SUMMARY (5/5) - IT IS WELL WRITTEN, DOESN'T REVEAL TOO MUCH OF THE STORY BEFORE READING AND SOUNDS REALLY INTERESTING. IT MAKES CURIOUS ABOUT THE STORY AND ANTICIPATING THE STORY.
APPEARANCE (5/5) - THE STRUCTURE IS REALLY GOOD TOO, IT IS NICE TO READ AND DOESN'T LOOK MESSY.
CHARACTERS/CASTS (10/10)
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT (5/5) - SO FAR THE STORY IS STILL AT ITS BEGINNING BUT WE CAN ALREADY SEE SOME CHANGES BETWEEN NAMJOON AND JIMIN. SINCE THEY CHANGED THEIR BODIES, THEIR INTERACTIONS ARE FRIENDLIER AND IT IS LIKE THEY SLOWLY START TO CARE FOR EACH OTHER AND THINK ABOUT THEIR LIVES IN A DIFFERENT AND THAT IT IS POSSIBLE TO HAVE A DIFFICULT, HARD LIFE IN DIFFERENT WAYS.
CHARACTER'S RELATIONS (5/5) - THE INTERACTIONS BETWEEN YOUR CHARACTERS ARE GOOD TO READ AND NICE. THE FRIENDSHIP BETWEEN JIMIN AND TAEHYUNG IS REALLY GOOD WRITTEN AND NICE TO READ BECAUSE MANY OF THE OTHER CHARACTERS, DOESN'T MATTER WHETHER IT IS A MAIN OR A SIDE CHARACTER HAVE THIS CHARACTER THAT DOESN'T SEEM TO CARE MUCH FOR OTHERS SO THIS FRIENDSHIP STANDS REALLY OUT IN YOUR STORY.
I AM REALLY CURIOUS ABOUT A DEEPER RELATION BETWEEN NAMJOON AND TAEHYUNG AND HOW IT WILL CHANGE THROUGH THE STORY BECAUSE THEY CARE FOR EACH OTHER BUT NAMJOON IS UNABLE TO SHOW IT.
THE RELATION BETWEEN NAMJOON AND JIMIN IS INTERESTING TOO BECAUSE IT SEEMS LIKE THEY WERE SOMETHING LIKE CLOSER IN THE PAST BUT SOMETHING HAPPENED AND EVERYTHING CHANGED THGOUH THERE ARE ALSO TIMES IT DOESNT SEEM TO BE THAT CASE AT ALL. SO THIS IS INTERESTING AND MAKES YOU ANTICIPATING THE FUTURE CHAPTERS.
I AM REALLY CURIOUS ABOUT A DEEPER RELATION BETWEEN NAMJOON AND TAEHYUNG AND HOW IT WILL CHANGE THROUGH THE STORY BECAUSE THEY CARE FOR EACH OTHER BUT NAMJOON IS UNABLE TO SHOW IT.
THE RELATION BETWEEN NAMJOON AND JIMIN IS INTERESTING TOO BECAUSE IT SEEMS LIKE THEY WERE SOMETHING LIKE CLOSER IN THE PAST BUT SOMETHING HAPPENED AND EVERYTHING CHANGED THGOUH THERE ARE ALSO TIMES IT DOESNT SEEM TO BE THAT CASE AT ALL. SO THIS IS INTERESTING AND MAKES YOU ANTICIPATING THE FUTURE CHAPTERS.
THE AUTHOR'S MINDSET (39/40)
LOGICALLY (10/10) - SO FAR THERE ARE NO PARTS IN THE STORY THAT DON'T MAKE SENSE OR COULD CONFUSE WHILE READING IT.
ORIGINALITY (10/10) - I DON'T REALLY KNOW WHETHER THERE ARE MANY STORIES WITH SUCH A PLOT BECAUSE I PERSONALLY DIDN'T READ ONE SO FAR, SO IN MY POINT OF VIEW IT STILL IS ORIGINAL.
TONE (5/5) - THE ATMOSPHERE FITTED THE SITUATIONS OF THE STORY LIKE FOR EXAMPLE THE THUNDER WHEN NAMJOON AND JIMIN FOUGHT MADE THE SCENE MORE INTENSE AND IT WAS LIKE A SIGN FOR THE BODY SWAP PART OF THE PLOT TO BEGIN NOW.
NARRATION (4/5) - THE POVS ARE GOOD SO FAR, THE ONLY TIME I WAS A BIT CONFUSED WAS WHEN THEY FIRST WOKE UP WITH SWITCHED BODIES BECAUSE OF THE WAY YOU CALLED THEM TO SHOW WHO IS TALKING RIGHT NOW BECAUSE IT WAS A BIT HARD TO UNDERSTAND AT FIRST WHEN JIMIN IS TALKING TO NAMJOON IN HIS BODY WHILE HE IS IN NAMJOONS BODY.
STORYLINE (10/10) - THE BEGINNING OF THE STORY IS REALLY INTERESTING AND MYSTERIOUS, WHAT HAPPENED IN THE PAST FOR JIMIN TO ACT LIKE THAT? THIS IS A SECRET TO FIND OUT THROUGH READING THE STORY SO A REASON TO ADD TO THE LIST WHY TO READ IT.
WE GET A SHORT INTRODUCTION OF OUR MAIN CHARACTERS AND THEIR LIVES AND HOW THEY ARE EVERYTHING BUT EASY.
HERE I ALREADY LIKED NAMJOON BECAUSE HE FITS THE SAYING TO NOT JUDGE SOMEONE WITHOUT KNOWING THE PERSONS STORY BECAUSE HE MAY ACT RUDE AND HEARTLESS TO HUMANS BUT HE STILL SHOWS THAT HE CARES FOR ANIMALS.
YOUR DESCRIPTIONS IN THE STORY ARE REALLY GOOD AND MAKE IT EASIER TO IMAGINE SOME PICTURES IN YOUR HEAD WHILE READING AND YOUR WRITING STYLE IS GOOD TOO. THE STORY IS WELL WRITTEN, INTERESTING SO THERE IS ALWAYS SOMETHING THAT MAKES YOU CONTINUING READING IT.
THE FACT THAT NAMJOON AND TAEHYUNG ARE BROTHERS WHO ARE THE TOTAL OPPOSITE OF EACH OTHER BUT ACTUALLY ARE NOT THAT DIFFERENT IS PRETTY NICE TOO, IT IS LIKE A SIDE STORY THAT SHOWS THEIR RELATIONS AND HOPEFULLY IT WILL GET BETTER WITH TIMES PASSING BY.
THE FIGHT BETWEEN NAMJOON AND JIMIN WAS SURPRISING BECAUSE I DIDN'T THOUGHT THAT JIMIN WOULD ACTUALLY HIT SOMEONE BUT I LIKED THAT AT LEAST HE IS NOT THE CHARACTER THAT LETS HIMSELF BEING BULLIED WITHOUT DOING SOMETHING.
NAMJOON AND JIMIN CHANGE THEIR BODIES OVER NIGHT AND WHEN THEY FIRST MEET UP, THEY ARE ABLE TO TALK NORMALLY WITH EACH OTHER AND ACTUALLY SHOW RESPECT.
IT IS A NICE VIEW OF HOW A FUTURE COULD BE WITH THEM BEING FRIENDS OR SOMETHING LIKE THAT.
THE FLOW OF THE STORY IS GOOD SO FAR, IT IS NICE HOW YOU DIDN'T START WITH THE BODY SWAPPING IN THE FIRST CHAPTERS BUT CHOOSE TO SHOW THEIR LIVES AND RELATIONS AT FIRST WHICH LEADS TO THE MAIN PART OF THE PLOT.
WE GET A SHORT INTRODUCTION OF OUR MAIN CHARACTERS AND THEIR LIVES AND HOW THEY ARE EVERYTHING BUT EASY.
HERE I ALREADY LIKED NAMJOON BECAUSE HE FITS THE SAYING TO NOT JUDGE SOMEONE WITHOUT KNOWING THE PERSONS STORY BECAUSE HE MAY ACT RUDE AND HEARTLESS TO HUMANS BUT HE STILL SHOWS THAT HE CARES FOR ANIMALS.
YOUR DESCRIPTIONS IN THE STORY ARE REALLY GOOD AND MAKE IT EASIER TO IMAGINE SOME PICTURES IN YOUR HEAD WHILE READING AND YOUR WRITING STYLE IS GOOD TOO. THE STORY IS WELL WRITTEN, INTERESTING SO THERE IS ALWAYS SOMETHING THAT MAKES YOU CONTINUING READING IT.
THE FACT THAT NAMJOON AND TAEHYUNG ARE BROTHERS WHO ARE THE TOTAL OPPOSITE OF EACH OTHER BUT ACTUALLY ARE NOT THAT DIFFERENT IS PRETTY NICE TOO, IT IS LIKE A SIDE STORY THAT SHOWS THEIR RELATIONS AND HOPEFULLY IT WILL GET BETTER WITH TIMES PASSING BY.
THE FIGHT BETWEEN NAMJOON AND JIMIN WAS SURPRISING BECAUSE I DIDN'T THOUGHT THAT JIMIN WOULD ACTUALLY HIT SOMEONE BUT I LIKED THAT AT LEAST HE IS NOT THE CHARACTER THAT LETS HIMSELF BEING BULLIED WITHOUT DOING SOMETHING.
NAMJOON AND JIMIN CHANGE THEIR BODIES OVER NIGHT AND WHEN THEY FIRST MEET UP, THEY ARE ABLE TO TALK NORMALLY WITH EACH OTHER AND ACTUALLY SHOW RESPECT.
IT IS A NICE VIEW OF HOW A FUTURE COULD BE WITH THEM BEING FRIENDS OR SOMETHING LIKE THAT.
THE FLOW OF THE STORY IS GOOD SO FAR, IT IS NICE HOW YOU DIDN'T START WITH THE BODY SWAPPING IN THE FIRST CHAPTERS BUT CHOOSE TO SHOW THEIR LIVES AND RELATIONS AT FIRST WHICH LEADS TO THE MAIN PART OF THE PLOT.
PROPER USE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE (25/25)
PROPER GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION (10/10) - THERE ARE NO MAJOR MISTAKES THAT COULD BE DISTURBING WHILE READING YOUR STORY.
TERMINOLOGY (5/5) - YOUR VOCABULARY IS GOOD, THERE IS NO OVERUSE OF SPECIFIC WORDS OR PHRASES.
LANGUAGE BARRIER (10/10) - THERE WAS NO OVERUSE OF ANY OTHER LANGUAGE BESIDES ENGLISH THAT COULD CREATE A BARRIER.
REVIEWER'S ENJOYMENT (5/5)
SO FAR I ENJOYED READING YOUR STORY, I LIKE THE PLOT AND THE FLOW IN IT THAT LEADS FROM ONE SCENE TO THE NEXT WITHOUT ANY JUMPS. BESIDES THAT I ALSO LIKE YOUR DESCRIPTIONS AND WRITING STYLE THAT KEEPS YOUR INTEREST IN READING THE STORY UNTIL THE END.
SO I REALLY HOPE THIS REVIEW HELPS YOU IN A WAY AND I AM SORRY THAT IT TOOK ME SO LONG TO FINISH IT.
SO I REALLY HOPE THIS REVIEW HELPS YOU IN A WAY AND I AM SORRY THAT IT TOOK ME SO LONG TO FINISH IT.
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