NOTE: Four chapters - on-going.

(6/10) Title: I thought the title was something nice and simple, however it kind of spoils what the story is about. 

(8/10) Characters: Compared to Sohee in real life and in this fanfiction, it seemed like someone injected two liters of sugar in her. Anyways, explosive characters like Sohee are the ones I don't really favor because of their temper, however I understood that she had to play this role because it's the concept of the story. 

For TOP, I was wondering if TOP was thirty-six then how old is Dara? I love his weird character, for example when he was smiling near the trashcan I was imagining the whole scenario and I gave him the most judging face ever but I thought it was pretty funny. Or how he made the phone call to Sohee's house and they were just both insulting each other. 

For Dara, I love her character. She's like ASDFGHJKL; You really grasped how she is in real life and that is what's going to earn you some more points. 

For G-Dragon, erh .. 

For supporting characters it seemed like everyone in this story doesn't know what your inside voice is.

(7/10) Originality: Honestly this is the first time I've come across a story where you marry a thirty-six year old man when you're only eighteen .. so when I read the description I thought marrying a father was something really different compared to all the other arranged teen marriages. When I got into the first and second chapter to find out about their age difference, I was seriously mind blown. On another note thought, there are too many stories out there already about marriages. It kind of reminded me of this though.

(25/40) Storyline/Plot: I can only give you half because you're story is still on-going, however the flow is great and don't loose your touch on it! And I'm sure that after your story is complete than you'll get all fourty points, so don't be discouraged.

(15/25) Grammar/Errors: I understand that English isn't your first language, which is why below this I'll correct some mistakes for you. 

Examples from Chapter One; Throughout the story I saw how you tend to switched from past tense to present tense many times. I've also included a correction side and a suggestion one, and all of this is in chronlogical order. 

Original: "What? You have to open your presents first, then tell us what you feel about them. After, you have to share how you feel now that you are finally eighteen, an adult. Tell me when you are going to get married. Isn't it about time you have a boyfriend? " Sohee's mother nagged on and on. 

Suggestion: "What? You have to open your presents first, then tell us how you feel about them. Afterwards, you have to share how you feel now that you are finally eighteen, tell me when you are going to get married. Isn't it about time you get a boyfriend?" Sohee's mother nagged on and on. 

Original: *sighs* (Why was I born into this family...?) Sohee blamed the heavens.

Correction: *Sigh* (Why was I born into this family?) Sohee blamed the heavens. 

Original: "AHHHH!" Sohee stretched in her room, "finally all the nagging and noises are cut in half. *sighs* I'm already eighteen, yet I can't find a job. How am I supposed to get out of this hell house?" 

Correction: "AHHHH!" Sohee stretched in her room, "Finally all the nagging and noises are cut off. *sigh* I'm already eighteen, yet I can't find a job. How am I supposed to get out of this hell house?" 

Original: "Y-Ya my ears!" Sohee rubbed her ears, "my mom was nagging me this and that all morning, and now you are yelling in my ears."

Correction: "Y-Ya my ears!" Sohee rubbed her ears, "My mom was nagging me about this and that all morning, and now you are yelling in my ears."

Original: "YES! I AM!" Sohee suddenly shouts.

Correction: "YES! I AM!" Sohee suddenly shouted. 

Original: "Ah... hehe sorry, but exactly how am I going to get hire in this company? As a staff member?" 

Correction: "Ah... hehe sorry, but exactly how am I going to get hired in this company? As a staff member?"

Original: "Well yes, since anywhere you work, you always get fired. I figure you haven't tried auditioning for an entertainment company before, so why not try? You are tall and pretty, I'm sure you will make it."  

Correction: "Well yes, since everywhere you work, you always get fired. I figured you haven't tried auditioning for an entertainment company before, so why not try? You are tall and pretty, I'm sure you will make it."

Original: "I'm tall and pretty?" Sohee looked at herself in the mirror, "DON'T LIE!" Sohee looks like ghost with her pale skin and exhausted face expression. She hasn't even brushed her hair yet, and her clothes are all wrinkly and messy.

Correction: "I'm tall and pretty?" Sohee looked at herself in the mirror, "DON'T LIE!" Sohee looked like a ghost with her pale skin and exhausted face expression. She hasn't even brushed her hair yet, and her clothes are all wrinkly and messy.

Original: W-Well maybe not now, but once you dress up and get a makeover," Dara tries to calm down Sohee, "You do want to move out right?"

Correction: W-Well maybe not now, but once you dress up and get a makeover," Dara tried to calm down Sohee, "You do want to move out right?"

Original: "I... yes I do so very much..." Sohee replied.

Suggestion: "I... yes I do, very much." Sohee replied.

Original: "Eh... but I'm not so mentally or physically prepared... let alone emotionally prepared..." Sohee sighed, "Well whatever, I want to leave this place as soon as possible and by all means."

Suggestion: "Eh... but I'm not so mentally or physically prepared... let alone emotionally..." Sohee sighed, "Well whatever, I want to leave this place as soon as possible and by all means."

Note: Here you said 'Sohee sighed,' up above you've written '*sighs*' as a gesture to let the readers understand her actions. But as a suggestion, why not go back and change it to say 'Sohee sighed,' or 'Sohee let out a long breath.' 

Original: Morning came and the sun is shining, but Sohee is still dead asleep, slobbering on her pillow. Heavy footsteps came towards Sohee's room followed by loud knocks at the door. 

Correction: Morning came and the sun was shining, but Sohee is still dead asleep, slobbering onto her pillow. Heavy footsteps came towards Sohee's room followed by loud knocks at the door. 

Original: "FINE! DON'T WAKE UP! LIVE HERE ALL YOUR LIFE!"

"Huh? Live here all my life...?" Sohee suddenly became wide awake, "NEVER! SHOW ME THE WAY OUT!" Sohee ran to the door, swings it open, and hugs Dara, "DARA SAVE ME!" 

Correction: "FINE! DON'T WAKE UP! LIVE HERE FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE!"

"Huh? Live here for the rest of my life...?" Sohee suddenly became wide awake, "NEVER! SHOW ME THE WAY OUT!" Sohee ran to the door, swung it open, and hugs Dara, "DARA SAVE ME!" 

Note: If I've made a mistake myself or you think the correction isn't needed or right, comment down below so I can fix it or explain it to you. 

(4/5) Overall Enjoyment: I can't enjoy it just yet because you only stopped at four chapters but it seems like the next few chapters are going to be a blast. But sorry my Dara and G-dragon feels were acting up at the ending of the Job Offer chapter. Hurhur. So you have to update! I need to know what happens. 

(65/100) Points Total

Bonus: Your questions and focuses for us:

Storyline/Plot: This is answered above.

Is the story interesting?: Yes, I would definitely subscribe and read it if I was someone that liked these kind of genres. The stories I lean towards are mostly supernatural, fantasy, action. Basically most things fiction. 

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