Title: Anorexie

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Requestor's Username: PrimroseEverdeen

Reviewer's AFF Name: Amizupen

Date Received - Date Completed: May 16, 2015- May 30, 2015

Title (8/10):

The title is short and straight to the point, and no doubt, it is a fitting title. On the other hand is not attractive enough. I suggest to have titles that can leave suspense for the readers, so it can provoke questions and curiosities.

Character (20/20):

I am very strict on characterization, and with a hand over my heart, I said you have done a wonderful job. I fell in love with the characters. Jinri is so loveable, because she is so relatable. Taemin is a bit distance; however, that is the advantage to trap the readers with Jinri as if we are falling in love with Taemin. Using the fact that Jinri is a writer makes me feel even closer to the character. It is just like they actually live in my world, and wrote this story.

Originality (7/10):

This type of story happen in a lot of movies, books and TV shows. I kind of guessed what is going to happen and how it will end. Many writers use the hidden secret to attract the audience, and the ending is very popular in the fanfic world too. Nevertheless, I like reading because of the characters.

Storyline/Plot (28/30):

You have a very well organized sequence of events, and not a moment, I was left bored. From how they met to how the relationship developed, I see character development due to the storyline. It is simple, yet very entertaining. Well done!

Grammar/Errors (23/25):

I saw some mistakes you might want to reread it to fix them. There are spellings and capitalization and punctuation mistakes.

Overall Enjoyment (4/5):

I really like this. It calms me which is perfect for nighttime reading. I love the tone and mood created by the description of the interactions.

Bonus:

I apologize for any harsh criticism. Thank you. Happy writing!

Points Total: (90/100)

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