Sincerely Yours - Minderaser
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Story: Sincerely Yours
Requestor's Username: Minderaser
Reviewer's AFF Name: XiuminWolf
Date Received - Date Completed: 16 August 2014
NOTE: None
(9/10) Title: It was Simple and plain.. Kind like the story.. good job
(10/10) Character: Bora&Kris Relationship is Ummm.. how do i say this... Simple...their relationship didn't really want me to continue.. But Myungsoo character surprise me.. i really enjoyed his part.. how he can read lips.. very interesting
(10/10) Originality: It was very real.. nothing made believed... i enjoyed it but i don't understand who is writing the letter... who is it??
(20/40) Storyline/Plot: The plot didn't give much info so i was really confused.. work on that
(10/25) Grammar/Errors: Chapters..
1) Modesty is the enemy of desparation..
2) she trailed tucking her arm in his as they made their way down the narrow hallway that led to the living rooom
3) Kris's gray hyundai
4) She retorted sarcatically
5) folding her arms on her chest for dramtic effect.
6) she decided to stare out the window to avoid the useless arguement
7) You should cut down on the chicken sweety.3x - Sweetie
8) A boy walked out of a convience store 3x
9) She couldn't help her curiousity
10) scribbbled on his signature so Cupcake would know it
11)
(5/5) Overall Enjoyment: Ummm.. I really don't know..
(64/100) Points Total It was 2 Boring
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