He's back - hunhantaeny

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(10/10) Title: Very good and clear title. It's like the forbidden words, "HE'S BACK", jk. 

(10/10) Character: The characters seem fun and work together. I like their personalities.

(10/10) Originality: I can't say, there hasn't been much for me to say anything on it. It's not too cliche, I really like the plot, it made me want to keep on reading. So hurry up and update! I like the idea of magic.

(40/40) Storyline/Plot: A very good plot. It really pulls in hte reader. It was very intense and almost creepy, it was something different. I need to read more though.

(22/25) Grammar/Errors: It wasn't one of the worst errors for sure, but a very hard thing to do is always write in the correct tense. You tend to change the time a lot. Just work on that and always re-read. You had a few misspells, but just be careful.

(5/5) Overall Enjoyment: I liked it, one of the first magical stories I've read on this site!

(97/100) Points Total

Bonus: Very good, continue and good luck in the contest!!!

 

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Reviewer: LAVI1903
Review for: hunhantaeny

Requested on: 6/15/2015
Finished On: 6/16/2015
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WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu #1
One more thing. I know the Description and the forward are super long. But I planned this story to be like a Novella/Soap Opera.
It may seem like I'm giving away to much in the Description and The Forward, but as you realize you might notice that I haven't.
There are three main parts to this story:
The Past-Childhood
The Past- Orphans/Teens
The Present- The main setting, in which the forward revealed nothing.

I'm an interactive author, meaning I ask questions at the end and leave hints here and there for the readers to try there best at guessing. (They become more invested in my story this way, lol)
WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu #2
-Username : WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
-Profile link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/49463

- Story title : Love Me Right
- Story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/976222/love-me-right-mpreg-hunhan-taoris-kaisoo-sulay-chanbaek-chenmin

-Genre : OT12, Angst, Mpreg, Fluff, Comedy, Growth, Friendship, Life, and "LEARNING TO LOVE"

- On-going | To be a long fic.

- Reviewer : KaihleeLo

- So The title of the fic is "Love Me Right", but it has nothing to do with the EXO song; even though some would just assume. The reason why I titled it 'Love Me Right' is because 6 of the main characters suffered in their childhood and eventually were orphaned. They don't know how to let themselves love. In particular, Luhan. As for the other 6 'Love' and 'Lust' are two different things.

- So before you read, I would like to point out, that the pacing of the story and the built up is exactly how I planned. I don't want to rush Romance because you don't 'fall in love' over night, and the characters need to mature. Also, there is a pattern to my chapters "The Past" chapters are essentially flashbacks. "The Present" is taking place now. For every 5 "The Present" chapters, it will be followed by 2 "The Past" chapters; Childhood/Teen years.

- I have a reader who offered to proofread my chapters since I had some typos, and I don't have the time to go back and fix them. "I always update between 12 am - 5 am, so that is the main reason". She is still editing the earlier chapters so please realize I am fixing the errors.


Oh gosh this was a lot. I'm sorry. I'm just really nervous, and I wanted to explain the above before you review.
-Tigress- #3
Chapter 127: Hey can I have someone send me my review here so I can save it?
This archive is non-selectable so I can't save it myself.
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