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*Characterization - You're characters when done well.Outstandingly realistic, it sure gave the vibe of how it should feel. Is an example of what we all feel deep insde,also knows as our fears and that so known as darkness in our hearts.
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request on: 09/22/15
REVIEWER: eunriehyun
finished on: 09/27/15
score: 98/100
Title: (10/10)
LOGICAL (3/3) - the title ties in legitimately with the story and its plot.
EYE-CATCHING (3/3) - the title was interesting, it did hook right away. Curiosity got the best of me.*sighs*
original (4/4) -Aphelion, is new and refreshing.As I said,it made me curious specially since you took every chance to related to every scene in the story, and it all just clicked with the dark world your characters lived in.
story's foreword/description (10/10)
story's summary (5/5) -IT only took that one sentence to tell the readers of the truth behind the beauty of having imagination.
appearance (5/5) - It was well organized since you gave the hints of each main characters' roles, gave the warning and still with all the given information you were able to get the readers -myself included- curious about the story,and how it would end.
characters/casts (10/10)
character development (5/5) - From beginning to ending,Yifan wanted freedom because his life a useless piece of sh*t.Yixing the person that liked a bit of romance/or being romantic at first but after some chapters it change because he is more the guy with the innocent mask.
Luhan is an artist and expresses his feelings and his mind through his poems. They are his way to leave something behind after his death. Tao was their shadow and he continued to be until the end,which caused him... you know what.
character's relations (5/5) - Their interactions were realistic and believable,as the way closed friends would react ,although they WERE all broken in this story.
the author's mindset (40/40)
THE STORY was unique from the beginning, i have never seen this kind of storyline before. It can get you very interested in the story, and at some point you can't get your eyes off of it.is that type of story that once you've read will hunt you for a while until another story takes its place. (See what did there?)
ANYWAYS,The whole setting was very interesting. College, where there are a lot of people, everything could happen... And you picked the years when the person is the most vulnerable. You thought this through. You put the effort and I was glad you pulled it of and turn it into this, quiet admirable.
proper use of the english language (23/25)
proper grammar/punctuation (08/10) - there were a few grammar error,bUT those you can fix without a problem.
Ex. In chapter one- lived》lives
Chapter two- tortured 》 torturers
Chapter two-in 》 them
termonology (5/5) - The vocabulary used was well expanded and easy to read.
language barrier (10/10) - I found no language barrier.
Reviewer's enjoyment (5/5)
I enjoy it to the end. I'm a fan when it comes to this type of stories. I knew that Tao was going to die,I actually thought he was going to kill himself,but I'm pretty sure he was killed. Hehehe~ I loved the "so We whish on fallen angels",I truly love it and I thought it was creative, it was actually the first thing that captured my attention before I even read the first sentence.xD
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