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Author: Hyeonhee
Reviewed By: kpoperrose

Requested Date: 12/17/15

Review Completion: 12/18/15
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Title: 10/10

Logical: 3/3

The title relates to the story as it is the title of Yoongi's book in the story. The book is about Peach, a peach, who has to wither before he can talk to Blue, the sky, again.

Eye-catching: 3/3

It is an unusual title which makes it eye-catching.

Original: 4/4
I haven't encountered a fic with the same title.

Description/Foreword: 10/10

Summary: 5/5

The summary was very well written and very beautiful.

Appearance: 5/5

Everything was arranged neatly.

Character Development/Showcasing: 8/10

Development: 3/5

There isn't much character development yet as the story is still in its early stages. Stories of how Jimin became bubbly hasn't been written yet and whether Yoongi ends up taking medication after a certain incident.

Relation/Cast: 5/5

The realtionships between the characters are all very realistic, especially Yoongi's and Jimin's relationship because it took Yoongi some time to warm up to Jimin, which is a usual thing and the reason why there were points docked.

Behind the Author's Mind: 34/40

Logical: 10/10

Everything in the story was realistic and readers can relate to the characters, Yoongi, who has given up, and Jimin, who decides to stay positive his whole life.

Original: 7/10

It's not the first time I've encountered a plot like this. A two people meet in the hospital and one is dying while the other is disabled. One is pessimistic and the other is optimistic. This causes the pessimistic one to have a better outlook on life.

Tone: 5/5

The tone of the story was very pleasant as it radiated the simplicity and brightness of Jimin's mood, which matches the story very well.

Naration: 4/5

The story was written in a third point of view. Unfortunately, the tense used wasn't consistent. For example, in Chapter 1, 'something about the older man disturbs Jimin.' In this case, the word 'disturbs' should be written as 'disturbed' as the story is written in past tense. The word 'bothered' can also be used to replace 'disturbed'.

Storyline: 8/10

The storyline was very smooth. The only moral so far is to keep being optimistic.

Proper Use of the English Language: 24/25

Proper Grammar/Punctuation: 10/10

There were some minor grammatical errors.

In Chapter 1,

'there's no use on mourning over his fate' should be 'there's no use in mourning his fate' The word 'over' isn't usually used after mourning. An example of this would be 'She's mourning her late husband.'

'snapping the trance between both Jimin and Yoongi.' should be 'snapping both Jimin and Yoongi out of their trance.'

Terminology: 4/5

The vocabulary was neither limited or expanded but there were some interesting words being used like 'wither' and 'celestial being'.

Language Barrier: 10/10

There were no overused Korean phrases.

General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 5/5
I really enjoyed reading the story and I got so disappointed when I reached the last chapter and Yoongi's in the ICU, why author?! I really liked how Jimin stays positive even though he has an obvious incapability. I also liked how Taehyung calls peaches mini butts and Taehyung's comment towards Yoongi while Jimin and Taehyung were both crying over Peach dying just made me crack up.

Total points: 91/100

A little note from me

Congratulations! That's the highest score I've given out so far. I hope you continue writing this story because I never realized how much I needed this AU. I hope you found my review helpful, not that there's a lot of improvement needed for the story. Keep writing because I think this is one of my favourite fics. Fighting author-nim!

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