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Author: exoismyoverdose
Reviewed By: KaihleeLo

Requested Date: 11/08/15

Review Completion: 11/08/15
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Title: 9/10

Logical: 3/3

I can see how and why the title will have everything to do with the story.
Eye-catching: 2/3
To be honest I wouldn't check out the story if I was browsing through a list of stories. Mainly because the title already gives away its purpose and story. Ans especially sing geek to chic is quite a common theme among romance novels and films. If the focus was on a geek. 
Original: 4/4
The title itself is original. 

Description/Foreword: 9/10

Summary: 4/5

The summary is filled with fillers. I'd recommend rewording and shortening it down to capture more readers' interests. 
Appearance: 5/5
Clean. Simple. Easy to follow.

Character Development/Showcasing: 8/10

Development: 5/5

Since we're only seven chapters into the story (especially short chapters), it's still hard to see the development. But from the progress of each chapter, I can definitely see some development from Minah. She may become more sophistorical.  
Relation/Cast: 3/5
 

Again (like EunYoung) the lead,  Minah, is too much of a Mary Sue. She's flawless, a geek who's at the top of the school who has obvious dislikes and likes, but they aren't fully incorporated into the story. Minah hate playboys as a geek, yet she easily agree to the deal on the spot. Her character would have been more relatable if she gave it some thoughts and consider the other options. Also, as the smartest student in the whole school, it's surprising she's not part of clubs, etc. Usually the smarter students paticipate in school activities and becomes role models for other students. Especially in South Korea, where the school system is super competitive. 

Jongin and Minah acts as if they've been friends a while. There was no awkwardness or distant in their interactions. As someone Minah is helping for the first time, I'm surprised she even allow them to go to her house or preferably her room. Plus the Jongin laying down on Minah's bed is definitely odd. Their interaction is hard to read because it's too unbeliavable.

Behind the Author's Mind: 33/40

Logical: 10/10

The logic behind this story is to educate readers, if you ask me. And it did to a certain level.   
Original: 8/10
The idea of geek to chic is quite common for any romance and fluff story. But to idea of doing so for a presidental election is quite a fresh plot. 
Tone: 4/5
Again as a first person POV, the author's tone can't be seen. But the tone of Minah is unstable. She gives us her thoughts and insights as to what she's seeing, but she doesn't do a well job at explaining it. (In my opinion). For example, she mentioned the group EXO, but it would have been a great deal to see what's up with the group. What does she know about the group? The members? Does she know anything to easily be connected to Jongin?

Naration: 5/5

The story was kept under Minah's POV, so no complaints here. 
Storyline: 6/10
At certain points the story doesn't add up. Why would the teacher question whether Minah was cheating or not? And what good would it do for the teacher to read out a note? Usually teacher would just take the note and continue on with class, to avoid wasting time. And as the smartest student, I'm surprised she was easily given detention. 

The flow of the story was absolutely rushed. I can't get a sense of reality here. Why would geeks, who has no true passion in fashion, even consider fashion or fame as a way to win votes? Was it only because they planned to beat Bora by using her own idea? Was the school focused on fashion? Is it just a title given to the best dresser at the school? What's so special about being the president at the school? Why did Minah even want to be president? Or why did she even want to go against Bora? Couldn't she back out? What was Minah's motive?

Proper Use of the English Language: 25/25

Proper Grammar/Punctuation: 10/10

I saw very few grammatical errors. Your writing has definitely improved with this one. 
Termonology: 5/5
No problem here either. 
Language Barrier: 10/10
The story was fully written in English so I saw no issue here. 

General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 3/5
The pace of the story was too fast-paced for me. I couldn't connect with the story and enjoy it as much as I'd like. I do like the mini-facts throughout the story. Try to keep your story interesting by adding hooks, twists, etc, to keep the story intridging. Don't leave it too blunt just by telling us what happened then move on with it. Give us the back story of the characters and reveal more of the lead's hobbies, interests, etc. As you said, Minah seems to enjoy reading, yet she doesn't refer to books or randomly goes off about a book she's reading, and so on. So it doesn't really show us she enjoys reading. 

Total Points: 89/100