Playground of Secrets - Minderaser
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NOTE: Rated M + Two Chapters
(9/10) Title: I deducted one point just because I'm assuming a playground is important, but so far there's nothing about the playground. However, of secrets, that's interesting and catchy. All the characters have secrets and I'm dying to see what secrets will be revealed later on. Other than that, the title is catchy and unique (to me). Keep writing~!
(9/10) Character: Since the story is just starting, I'm curious to see more of each leads. I love how Myungsoo and Chaiyo were aware of Key's ual orientation and doesn't mind, instead they help him out and protects him. (From what I got). Kudos here, I hope to see a stronger Key later~!
(10/10) Originality: The feels, description, and reality of it were real and easy to follow. I love how each boys are overcoming their own illnesses and obstacles in their own way.
(39/40) Storyline/Plot: So far I'm loving the storyline. As I already mentioned, it's easy to follow, it was sad and addicting (^^). I wanted more and I hope you update soon! The bullying in here at the beginning came across well, the friendship between the three were strong and they were familiar with each other (I love that). I would give you a full grade here but because there's also the plot, I deducted one. Of course I can't expect a plot fused into two chapters but that's how grading works (>.<).
(24/25) Grammar/Errors: I found some errors but they weren't major errors. Some proofread will totally fix those errors. Some words were misspelled, but other than that, all is great! Kudos!
(5/5) Overall Enjoyment: I L-O-V-E-D it! I upvoted and subscribed just to show you that your story deserved them! Keep writing because I'll definitely keep reading. I was never bored and I loved all the characters in it so I'm looking forward to more. Especially Myungsoo and Yuri!
(96/100) Points Total
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flow: I thought the flow was just right. It wasn't rushed nor dragged.
characterization: So far I believe all characters' personalities are coming out just beautifully. I don't have any complaints as to how each character's were portrayed or have any questions about why they do certain things. My curiousity were answered in the story.
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Review for: Minderaser
Requested on: 08/24/2014
Finished On: 08/24/2014
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