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Author: Blu3Wind
Reviewed By: -Vminatic

Requested Date: 27/1/17

Review Completion: 7/5/17
Story Link: Link
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Title: 10/10

Logical: 3/3

The title tells a lot of your story. I've always liked Soulmate AUs!
Eye-catching: 3/3
It was unique and it did catch my attention. I was immediately reminded of 'Soulmates' when I first read your title.  
Original: 4/4
It is a unique title which I have hardly seen before.

Description/Foreword: 10/10

Summary: 5/5

Your description left me entirely hooked. I was really excited to read your story because I've always liked Soulmate AU stories!
Appearance: 5/5
Overall, the appearance is very neat. 

Character Development/Showcasing: 7/10

Development: 4/5

I could see the clear development in your characters like Yerin for example. Her development was very, very well done, in my opinion.
Relation/Cast: 3/5
I felt that you had too many casts in one short story which left me very, very confused most of the times. You had only built on Chanyeol's and Yerin's relationship and Chanyeol's x Hee Jin's relationship. However, the rest of your characters, I did not exactly feel the passion of their love for each other. Sure, they might not be the main characters but that doesn't mean that you can "close an eye" on them. I think you should develop them more, however not too much or too little. I felt that by having so many characters in the story, some of them weren't even important. Try to cut down on the characters or give each of them an important role. 

Behind the Author's Mind: 28/40

Logical: 5/10

I could see where the story was going. However, it was too predictable. With your plot, having Chanyeol ending up with Yerin or Heejin is too predictable. What I'm trying to say here is that having both endings are predictable for your readers. It doesn't create a tension for the reader to read on and be curious. In my case, I wasn't excited at all because the ending was too obvious. However, I felt that you did built your main characters up well.
Original: 8/10
I have seen similar plots like yours before. However, you developed the characters and narrated it differently. That made your story original.
Tone: 5/5
The tone was always fitting with the atmosphere.

Naration: 4/5

The narration was great overall. You were able to describe the feelings well.
Storyline: 6/10
Your storyline was interesting up to a point. As stated above, I love soulmate AUs! However, like I also said, it was predictable. Overall, I did like your storyline.

Proper Use of the English Language: 25/25

Proper Grammar/Punctuation: 10/10

Overall, your grammar was really well done. I did not see much mistakes and if there were mistakes, it did not affect my mood and the flow of the story.

Termonology: 5/5
Vocabulary was well done
Language Barrier: 10/10
There was little use, if not no use at all, of Korean or other languages.

General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 3/5
Overall, I'll give my enjoyment rate a 2.5/5. The story overall did not really appeal to me much. It's not a story I would read again. But! I'll just give you a tip here: having too many characters in a story can have a negative impact. Readers might not be able to handle too many characters at once and would often get confused. Try not to have too many characters if they are not going to play an important role.
Also, I would like to apologise for taking so long to get this done! ><

Total points: 83/100