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KillerGal
request on: 9/19/15
REVIEWER: eunriehyun
finished on: 9/19/15
score: 96/100
Title: (10/10)
LOGICAL (3/3)-the title ties in legitimately with the story and its plot. 
EYE-CATCHING (3/3)-The TITLE is really interesting,it hook my attention right away.
original (4/4) - is it new and refreshing. From the title I knew right away that I could expect death,gore, and brutality,which did occur in different ways. 
 
story's foreword/description (10/10)
story's summary (5/5) - it lure me in from the first sentence. I was like,"damn,this is gonna be good!"
appearance (5/5) - its well organize and NICELY done. 
 
characters/casts (10/10)
character development (5/5) - Lu Han's character reminded me of Rikako oryo from Psycho pass,is a very awesome anime. (I seriously recommend!) And I felt the similarities, except for the originality you build him up.
character's relations (5/5) - it was short the inner action between the oc and Lu han, but what little did you write I perceived that he stalked her, and waited for  the end which we know what happend.
 
the author's mindset (36/40)
LOGICALLY (10/10) - IT made sense and it was done at a well pace. 
ORIGINALITY (08/10) -I found THE STORYLINE  NEW and original when it comes to the fan-fictional world,but as in general it was a bit cliché. (A wonderful one,to say the least.)
TONE (5/5) - loved it~ very well put.
NARRATION (3/5) - I would have loved a bit more detail on the whOle master piece he created. (A bit to much?) But it was at a excellent good pace and it was understandable. 
STORYLINE (10/10) - ALL IN ALL,THE STORY'S PLOT AND STORYLINE was smooth. 
 
proper use of the english language (25/25)
proper grammar/punctuation (10/10) - I didn't see any errors,actually it was good writing. 
termonology (5/5) -The vocabulary was expanded.
language barrier (10/10) -Although English isn't your first language, you did great!
 
Reviewer's enjoyment (5/5)
I enjoyed it!Like I said it reminded me of psycho pass and of Rikako oryo and her 'lovely' art work and it just appeared perfect. The ending! My, I wonder why he thought of putting a silver moon together with his black rose,wouldn't have been better if it was a gem:a ruby or a beautiful pearl to shOw the resemblance of the girls purty. NOw that wouldve beeN a perfect score.
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WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#1
One more thing. I know the Description and the forward are super long. But I planned this story to be like a Novella/Soap Opera.
It may seem like I'm giving away to much in the Description and The Forward, but as you realize you might notice that I haven't.
There are three main parts to this story:
The Past-Childhood
The Past- Orphans/Teens
The Present- The main setting, in which the forward revealed nothing.

I'm an interactive author, meaning I ask questions at the end and leave hints here and there for the readers to try there best at guessing. (They become more invested in my story this way, lol)
WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#2
-Username : WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
-Profile link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/49463

- Story title : Love Me Right
- Story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/976222/love-me-right-mpreg-hunhan-taoris-kaisoo-sulay-chanbaek-chenmin

-Genre : OT12, Angst, Mpreg, Fluff, Comedy, Growth, Friendship, Life, and "LEARNING TO LOVE"

- On-going | To be a long fic.

- Reviewer : KaihleeLo

- So The title of the fic is "Love Me Right", but it has nothing to do with the EXO song; even though some would just assume. The reason why I titled it 'Love Me Right' is because 6 of the main characters suffered in their childhood and eventually were orphaned. They don't know how to let themselves love. In particular, Luhan. As for the other 6 'Love' and 'Lust' are two different things.

- So before you read, I would like to point out, that the pacing of the story and the built up is exactly how I planned. I don't want to rush Romance because you don't 'fall in love' over night, and the characters need to mature. Also, there is a pattern to my chapters "The Past" chapters are essentially flashbacks. "The Present" is taking place now. For every 5 "The Present" chapters, it will be followed by 2 "The Past" chapters; Childhood/Teen years.

- I have a reader who offered to proofread my chapters since I had some typos, and I don't have the time to go back and fix them. "I always update between 12 am - 5 am, so that is the main reason". She is still editing the earlier chapters so please realize I am fixing the errors.


Oh gosh this was a lot. I'm sorry. I'm just really nervous, and I wanted to explain the above before you review.
-Tigress-
#3
Chapter 127: Hey can I have someone send me my review here so I can save it?
This archive is non-selectable so I can't save it myself.