Story: Gods & Monsters

Requestor's Username: Minderaser

Reviewer's AFF Name: KaihleeLo

Date Received - Date Completed: 14 August 2014 - 14 August 2014

NOTE: This story is Rated M - One chapter

(9/10) Title: I personally think the title "Gods & Monsters" isn't very common BUT the it's too plain. I feel you can definitely come up with something else. Be creative! Monsters really fit Jaejoong's personality and behaviour though!

(10/10) Character: Since it's in dialogue/script style I get a better understanding of each person's character so that was nicely done! And to be honest, I just enjoy Jaejoong's character in here! It was fun to read, a cold and badass Jaejoong! The other characters weren't described but I believe it can easily be imagined and made up by the readers. Jaejoong's character started out super strong and I hope you keep it just as strong!

(10/10) Originality: The story feels very real and original so I love it! It gives a gloomy and depressing mood and atmosphere but I believe that was your intention so very nicely done!

(39/40) Storyline/Plot: The storyline/plot is smoothly developing through the prologue and chapter one. The description is very catchy, I mean VERY! I'm interested as to see the plot starts to reveal itself. I love how it was also written by an inspiration.

(22/25) Grammar/Errors: I did not find major issues, however there were minor grammar errors and misplacing a word. However I was surprised! English isn't your first language? Well, it should be and it is! There were little errors and you did amazingly well keeping it in past tense. Kudos there!

(5/5) Overall Enjoyment: Did I not mention I love it? Well I did and I do! I subscribed so I will keep reading once you update it! I upvoted too because it was that GOOD! I really love it, the feels! I love Jaejoong so I really enjoy reading this. THANKS FOR LETTING ME!

(95/100) Points Total

Bonus: Your questions and focuses for us:

"plot and pace"

I thought the pace and plot was very interesting! Kudos!

Every flaw:

Under Prologue:

"See you soon again very Jaejoong. Now get the out of here." = I think you meant to switch those words around.

giuse = guise

"My mom hates cursing" = Mentioned mother hates cursing yet she curses, was Jaejoong lying?

Landlord Problems:

please, you look so desparate right now. = desperate

Gotta be quick this so I don't get caught up in the rain. = A word was left out

For the "Notice" and under the song, I LOVE IT! But it'll also be nice if you put the lyrics under the video xD

The title of the story is nowhere on the cover, just wanted to point that out

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