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Author: Light_Archer 
Reviewed By: Eunriehyun

Requested Date: 01/10/16
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Title: 10/10

Logical: 3/3

The title immediately gave the science fiction out and made it even better than any other possible upcoming title. 
Eye-catching: 3/3
It was eye catching and fresh. 
Eye-catching: 4/4
The title was unique and full of surprises.  

Description/Foreword: 10/10

Summary: 5/5

The description of the story was good to the point of making the readers ask themselves multiple questions before reading this marvelous story. 
Appearance: 5/5
Well presented and organized.  


Character Development/Showcasing: 10/10

Development: 5/5

Mari grow up a lot from the first chapter to the last and it pained me that her love wasnt back physically but...he will always be with her,right? (T.T)
Relation/Cast: 5/5
Each relationship Mari made was based on trust and true friendship. I could easily view them as your kids next door. 


Behind the Author's Mind: 36/40

Logical: 10/10

To me it was logical and it had potential. 
Original: 6/10
I viewedthe mv and made the comparison between the story and the video and I was surprised to see a great development.  Although, the plot wasn't yours as it belonged to VIXX, you made it your own. Which was good for you.
Tone: 5/5
The tone was good and it was thoughtful. 

Naration: 5/5

The narration of the story was easy to follow and very good.  
Storyline: 10/10
An amazing storyline! It had action,  love, melodrama,  mystery, and so much more to offer. It gave the reader vivid images of the story.


Proper Use of the English Language: 25/25

Proper Grammar/Punctuation: 10/10

It appeared to be free of errors.^^
Termonology: 5/5
Well use vocabulary and organized structures.  
Language Barrier: 10/10
No problem at all. 


General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 5/5
I almost cried at the end...I was reading Ken's message when a song in my Playlist started: Tabi no tochuu performed by  Natsumi Kiyoura and it just made the whole chapter mode angst and more touchy. It was a good read.

 

Total: 96/100

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WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#1
One more thing. I know the Description and the forward are super long. But I planned this story to be like a Novella/Soap Opera.
It may seem like I'm giving away to much in the Description and The Forward, but as you realize you might notice that I haven't.
There are three main parts to this story:
The Past-Childhood
The Past- Orphans/Teens
The Present- The main setting, in which the forward revealed nothing.

I'm an interactive author, meaning I ask questions at the end and leave hints here and there for the readers to try there best at guessing. (They become more invested in my story this way, lol)
WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#2
-Username : WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
-Profile link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/49463

- Story title : Love Me Right
- Story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/976222/love-me-right-mpreg-hunhan-taoris-kaisoo-sulay-chanbaek-chenmin

-Genre : OT12, Angst, Mpreg, Fluff, Comedy, Growth, Friendship, Life, and "LEARNING TO LOVE"

- On-going | To be a long fic.

- Reviewer : KaihleeLo

- So The title of the fic is "Love Me Right", but it has nothing to do with the EXO song; even though some would just assume. The reason why I titled it 'Love Me Right' is because 6 of the main characters suffered in their childhood and eventually were orphaned. They don't know how to let themselves love. In particular, Luhan. As for the other 6 'Love' and 'Lust' are two different things.

- So before you read, I would like to point out, that the pacing of the story and the built up is exactly how I planned. I don't want to rush Romance because you don't 'fall in love' over night, and the characters need to mature. Also, there is a pattern to my chapters "The Past" chapters are essentially flashbacks. "The Present" is taking place now. For every 5 "The Present" chapters, it will be followed by 2 "The Past" chapters; Childhood/Teen years.

- I have a reader who offered to proofread my chapters since I had some typos, and I don't have the time to go back and fix them. "I always update between 12 am - 5 am, so that is the main reason". She is still editing the earlier chapters so please realize I am fixing the errors.


Oh gosh this was a lot. I'm sorry. I'm just really nervous, and I wanted to explain the above before you review.
-Tigress-
#3
Chapter 127: Hey can I have someone send me my review here so I can save it?
This archive is non-selectable so I can't save it myself.