NOTE: 13 chapters + Rated M (Spoiler Alert)

(10/10) Title: I thought the title was perfect. You went about it and showed little snippets of how he was teasing her rathered than just pasting the term "tease" here and "tease" there. You played around with words and that was one major thing you did great with the story. 

(9/10) Character: Jimin comes off as someone kind, caring, and someone with a lot of problems. His character was pretty straight forward and so was K. Sarah and Mei are side characters so I would have preferred if there were more description of them since they stood out near the beginning. I had no complaints regarding the characters, they all had certain roles that will enhance both the main characters and storyline. 

K is an interesting character that is in control and to herself, I did see some character development in her. She became more opened to him when all she used to do was rely only on her friends. 

(10/10) Originality: I've read before and even more aggressive , but your story took upon a whole different turn; a more interesting and unique turn. The relationship between a male stripper and an university student added spice to the originality of the story. 

(34/40) Storyline/Plot: Being university students and attending a male strip club, I thought it was an interesting combination. However, since K is a goody two shoes, I'm not sure if that applies to school and studies as well or not. Like many stories if the characters go to school, then I would expect some studying, tests, homework, projects, or some scenes of any school and teacher related. The only time we get from school was when K is eating in the cafeteria with Sarah and Mei. 

We never got the back story about K, there wasn't any family or whatnot about her. Aside from Sarah and Mei being her only friends we don't really know about other people in K's life. I feel the plot has to do with when Jungkook and Yoongi showed up. 

There's not much I can say about the storyline since it has just beginning to pick up other than the relationships between each character's love life.

(21/25) Grammar/Errors: I'm sure it was your intent to use apostrophes as quotation marks but if you want it to be "proper" English then I would suggest using quotation marks just for the sake of it. I love the variety of dictions you used in here, it kept me interested and reading. Other than the repeats of the minor errors, there were no major errors that would distract me from reading. 

Original: ‘Would you like something to drink?’ he continued and gave a wink.

Suggestion: ‘Would you like something to drink?’ He continued and gave a wink.

Original:  ‘why of course. Anything the lady wants.’

Suggestion: ‘Why of course....’ 

Original: ‘Hey there,’ he said in a slightly husky tone. 

Suggestion:  ‘Hey there.’ He said in a slightly husky tone. (Since he's not continuing his sentence, put a period and capitalize the next word.)  

Original: He took the remote from the table and turned on a slow music.

Suggestion: He took the remote from the table and a slow song. [or] He took the remote from the table and slow music. (I believe music is plural.)

Original: Jimin chuckled, ‘but I heard otherwise.’

Suggestion: Jimin chuckled, ‘But I heard otherwise.’ (Don't forget those capitalization.)

Original: ‘Did you go home with that Jin boy?’ Mel said and stared down at Sarah, ‘don’t even try to deny it.’

‘What?’ Sarah said and gave a shrug, ‘he was done working and we met outside of the club. I don’t see how that’s breaking any rules.’

Suggestion: ‘Did you go home with that Jin boy?’ Mel said and stared down at Sarah, ‘Don’t even try to deny it.’

‘What?’ Sarah said and gave a shrug, ‘He was done working and we met outside of the club. I don’t see how that’s breaking any rules.’

Original:  Some would call me a , a , or anything to that effect. 

Suggestion: Some would call me a , a or anything to that effect. 

(4/5) Overall Enjoyment: I think I would have enjoyed this story more if there was more mini twists to it, to keep the story interesting. However I did upvote because I believe the story earned it and will continue to subscribe to read more later on~ 

(88/100) Points Total

Bonus: Your questions and focuses for us:

I think the progression/ flow and characterization: The flow felt slow in certain areas but perfect in others.

Any other suggestions would be great: Use all the tags, I noticed you only have five. So try to add two more, one could be for instance.

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