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Author: TwiceAzeline
Reviewed By: kpoperrose

Requested Date: 12/15/15

Review Completion: 12/18/15
Story Link: Link
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Title: 10/10

Logical: 3/3

The title relates to the story as the story is about a duel between the two main characters which ends up inconclusive.

Eye-catching: 3/3

It is eye-catching as readers want to know why the duel was inconclusive or whether it's a regular duel or a love-related duel.

Original: 4/4
I haven't encountered a fic with the same title.

Description/Foreword: 10/10

Summary: 5/5

The summary is very intriguing and was well written.

Appearance: 5/5

The whole thing was organized neatly.

Character Development/Showcasing: 4/10

Development: 1/5

Since it is a pretty short story and only covers one scene, there is a lack of character development as most of the character's characters are already developed. The only development is when Hyuna and Minhyun start respecting each other in the end.

Relation/Cast: 3/5

Because of the reason stated previously, there isn't a lot of character relation and the only significant interaction would be Hyuna and Minhyun duelling, which showed that they were both extremely prideful and didn't want to bring shame to their titles.

Behind the Author's Mind: 34/40

Logical: 10/10

The story is set in an alternate universe so the story isn't supposed to be that realistic.

Original: 9/10

The plot of two equally matched rivals going against each other isn't uncommon. What makes this story original is the fact that this is a practice duel and the only stake is their pride.

Tone: 5/5

The story was written in a very desciptive manner and captured the essence of the fight well.

Naration: 5/5

It is consistently written in past tense and a third point of view from both the character's perspectives.

Storyline: 5/10

The storyline was pretty smooth. Sadly, because it was a description of one scene it didn't have any morals or anything that could be learned from the characters.

Proper Use of the English Language: 25/25

Proper Grammar/Punctuation: 10/10

There were no noticable grammar mistakes in this story.

Termonology: 5/5

The author's vocabulary was expanded and used a lot of complicated words like 'ferocity' and 'melancholy'.

Language Barrier: 10/10

There were no overused Korean phrases.

General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 0/5

The story itself was very well written and the analysis of the characters' mindset were very good. Sadly, since it wasn't a real life and death situation, the story wasn't as interesting as it could've been. This was more of a duel concerning pride and it didn't really make me feel intense emotions. It didn't make me cry, laugh or bite my nails. It also didn't really want to make me read on.

Total points: 84/100

A little note from me

I'm sorry for the wait on this review :( and I apologize for being so harsh on my last comment. I felt that the story was very well written as there were no grammatical erorrs in the story and the high marks given to you. I hope my review helped you and I hope you'll be an even better writer after reading this. My only piece of advice would be to find out what you like in a story and incorporate the ida into your own. Fighting! :D

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