NOTE: 21 chapters

(10/10) Title:When I re-read the title, I can feel there's so much more in it's meaning. It gives a longing feeling. It almost makes me feel like I can hear rain.

(9/10) Character: Since there wasn't much description about them at the beginning, I can't quite compare, but I liked how their pasts gradually unfolded as the story went along.

(9/10) Originality: A very original story with some cliche life changing events. The life changing events are very realistic and brings out the nature of real life.

(40/40) Storyline/Plot: Wow, that was a incredible plot. It flowed well and was very interesting. Him changing and his suffering, the whole story summed out well, and it was interesting to see the characters progress in the storyline.  I liked the different ideas in plot twisting and revealing secrets.

(20/25) Grammar/Errors: Your major issue is not re-reading. I am positive that if you did, you wouldn't have such prominent errors. An even larger problem is telling the difference between past and future tense. You mix them up and change the tense in the middle of the sentence. Sometimes the wrong words are used in the sentence. For example: "vogue memory" in chp. 14 should be "vague memory". I had also searched up vogue, and found that it meant a trend at a certain time. The rest was well enough. But remember to read over the sentences aloud to get a feel of common sense in them. Speaking may help you write better through your brain. You've been doing great so far, so keep it up!

(4/5) Overall Enjoyment: I loved the creativity in the descriptions and poems in the story. You have a great imagination and mind for analogies.

(92/100)

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