Incompletion

Reviewer: dhaatk
Review for: Anastasiaeka

Requested on: 01/01/2015
Finished On: 01/17/2015
(I'm terribly sorry for taking so long)

NOTE: 7 Chapters (Spoiler Alert)

(8/10) Title: The title is original and refers to the story, though it might be hard to connect them to the fullest. The word “incompletion” itself seems odd, I'd prefer simple “Incomplete”.

(10/10) Character: Characters were developed just right and there weren't too many of them. You could have included more events to show how perfect Donghae is, but what's given is enough.

(10/10) Originality: I simply found everything about this story original, I can't comment more on this.

(38/40) Storyline/Plot: The story isn't very dramatic and that's good, because the reader is able to concentrate on little details. For example, it was a simple gesture of care when Yuri prevented Yoona from eating, since she remembered very well that the latter is allergic to seafood. Jumping back to first chapter and talking about girls' friendship, I liked the first encounter between them. The circumstances that made them meet were original. You master including flashbacks quite well. They all are in the right places and fill the story perfectly. However, from the fifth chapter you started jumping between POVs and I'd rather read the story from one point of view rather than three (Yoona, Yuri and third person's). It would also increase the level of flow.

(22/25) Grammar/Errors: There were some grammar mistakes, I've listed a few down below from first five chapters.

(4/5) Overall Enjoyment: The story was good but please be more attentive towards the grammar in the future.

(92/100) Points Total

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