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REQUEST ON: 2/12/16
REVIEWER: BLACKROSESTEARS
FINISHED ON: 3/20/16
SCORE: 100/100
TITLE: (10/10)
LOGICAL (3/3) - IT IS A PRETTY CLEVER TITLE THAT MAKES SENSE TOGETHER WITH THE PLOT.
I REALLY LIKED THE MEANING BEHIND IT AND HOW YOU CAN THINK ABOUT IT AND ITS IMPORTANCE FOR THE STORY.
I REALLY LIKED THE MEANING BEHIND IT AND HOW YOU CAN THINK ABOUT IT AND ITS IMPORTANCE FOR THE STORY.
EYE-CATCHING (3/3) - BECAUSE IT IS NOT REALLY A COMMON TITLE, IT REALLY CATCHES THE EYE AND IT SOUNDS INTERESTING. SO IT REALLY MAKES YOU WONDERING ABOUT THE STORY AND MAKES YOU WANTING TO READ IT.
ORIGINAL (4/4) - IT IS AN ORIGINAL TITLE THAT IS NOT OVERUSE IN THIS OR ANY OTHER VARIATIONS.
STORY'S FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION (10/10)
STORY'S SUMMARY (5/5) - IT IS WELL WRITTEN AND SOUNDS PRETTY INTERESTING. THE PLOT SOUNDS GOOD AND I LIKE HOW THERE IS A EXPLANATION FOR THE TITLE AND HOW IMPORTANT IT ACTUALLY IS FOR THE PLOT. IT DOESN'T REVEAL TOO MUCH OF THE STORY BUT JUST AS MUCH AS NEEDED TO MAKE SOMEONE CURIOUS ABOUT THE ACTUAL STORY.
APPEARANCE (5/5) - THE APPEARANCE IS GOOD TOO, THERE IS A STRUCTURE AND IT IS EASY TO READ WITHOUT THE POSSIBILITY TO GET LOST EVEN BEFORE READING THE ACTUAL STORY.
CHARACTERS/CASTS (10/10)
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT (5/5) - YOU SHOWED PRETTY WELL THROUGH THE FLASHBACKS HOW SEHUN CHANGED IN HIS RELATIONSHIP WITH NARA. YOU REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHY SEHUN IS SUDDENLY ACTING LIKE THAT TOWARDS NARA BECAUSE THEY SEEMED TO BE SO IN LOVE BUT WITH THE STORY CONTINUING IT GETS REALLY OBVIOUS AND YOU CAN SEE THAT SEHUN STILL LOVES HER AND CARES FOR HER SO MUCH AND WANTS TO PROTECT HER.
CHARACTER'S RELATIONS (5/5) - THEIR RELATIONSHIP IS REALLY REALISTIC AND YOU CAN FEEL THE LOVE IN EVERY WORD. IT IS NICE HOW NARA IS NOT THIS GIRL THAT STARTS TO CRY AND SCREAM AT SEHUN RIGHT AWAY BUT TRIES TO BE STRONG AND TALKS TO HIM, TRIES TO UNDERSTAND WHY ALL OF THIS HAPPENED WHICH MAKES REALLY SENSE BECAUSE THEY WERE FRIENDS IN THE PAST BEFORE THEIR RELATIONSHIP. ALSO HOW SHE LETS HIM GO IN THE END IS REALLY MAJOR OF HER AND SHOWS HOW MUCH SHE JUST LIKE HIM CARES FOR THE OTHER BECAUSE SHE STILL WANTS HIM TO BE HAPPY EVEN THOUGH IT IS NOT WITH HER.
THE AUTHOR'S MINDSET (40/40)
LOGICALLY (10/10) - THROUGH THE WHOLE STORY THERE WERE NO POINTS IN THE PLOT THAT WERE CONFUSING OR DIDN'T MAKE SENSE TO ME.
ORIGINALITY (10/10) - THE BASIC CONCEPT IS NOT SOMETHING NEW BUT HOW YOU WROTE ABOUT IT WAS SOMETHING I READ FOR THE FIRST TIME, THE REASONS WHY SEHUN ACTED THE WAY HE DID AND EVERYTHING SO IT BECAME ORIGINAL IN ITS OWN WAY.
TONE (5/5) - THE ATMOSPHERE IN THE STORY WAS ALWAYS FITTING IN THE SITUATIONS, LIKE THE MOODS WAS REALLY LIGHTS IN THE MAIN PARTS OF THE FLASHBACKS BUT PRETTY SAD IN THE PRESENT SCENES. LIKE IT STARTS TO RAIN WHEN THEY ARE TALKING AND CRYING, IT REALLY FITS THE SCENE AND MAKES THE FEELINGS OF YOUR CHARACTERS MORE INTENSE LIKE THAT.
NARRATION (5/5) - THE POVS WERE GOOD AND DIDN'T CHANGE TOO OFTEN OR TOO SUDDEN. WE GET TO SEE WHY THEY ACTED THE WAY THEY DID FROM BOTH POINT OF VIEWS WHICH MADE IT EASIER TO UNDERSTAND EVERYTHING.
STORYLINE (10/10) - THE START OF THE STORY IS REALLY INTERESTING, WE GET RIGHT INTO THE PLOT AND NARA CATCHING SEHUN CHEATING ON HER WITH ANOTHER GIRL. NARA TELLS US THAT SEHUN WAS NOT LIKE THAT IN THE PAST BUT WE CAN'T REALLY SAY THAT FOR OURSELVES AT THIS POINT SO THIS WAS INTERESTING AND MADE ME CONTINUE READING THE STORY BECAUSE IT REALLY WANTED TO FIND OUT ABOUT SEHUN AND WHY HE CHANGED. THEY SEEM TO BREAK UP BUT BEFORE THAT HAPPENS, NARA WANTS TO KNOW SEHUNS REASONS. THROUGH SEHUNS POINT OF VIEW, WE FIND OUT THAT HIS FATHER ABUSED HIS MOTHER BUT THAT SHE WAS NOT THAT INNOCENT HERSELF BECAUSE SHE CHEATED ON HIM. FROM THAT POINT EVERYTHING MADE SENSE TO ME EVEN BEFORE I CONTINUED READING THE STORY AND I REALLY LIKED HIS WAY OF THINKING EVEN THOUGH IT IS NOT ALWAYS THE RIGHT WAY.
THROUGH FLASHBACKS, WE SEE MORE OF THEIR LOVING RELATIONSHIP AND IMPORTANT TIMES IN IT LIKE WHEN SEHUN CONFESSED OR WHEN HE FIRST KISSED HER. THESE SCENES MAKE A NICE CONTRAST IN THE STORY FROM THE SAD PRESENT TO THE LOVELY AND FLUFFY PAST WHEN THEIR RELATIONSHIP WASN'T BROKEN.
THEN SEHUN REVEALS IN HIS THOUGHTS THAT HE IS AFRAID THAT NARA WILL CHEAT ON HIM IN THE FUTURE AND THAT HE WILL START BEATING HER UP LIKE HIS PARENTS, IT MAKES SENSE IN A WAY THOUGH I PERSONALLY WOULDN'T KNOW WHAT TO DO IN THIS SITUATION.
BUT HIS WAY OF ACTING, WANTING TO BREAK UP BEFORE THAT HAPPENS SHOWS IN ITS OWN WAY THAT HE CARES TOO MUCH ABOUT HER THAT HE DOESN'T WANT TO HURT HER LIKE THIS.
WHEN SHE ASKS SEHUN WHETHER HE STILL LOVES HER OR NOT HE LIES AND NARA BREAKS UP WITH HIM.
HERE IT IS REALLY NICE HOW THEY BREAK UP IN A RATHER NICE WAY WHEN WE SEE THEIR SITUATION BECAUSE NARA ACCEPTS IT THOUGH IT WILL HURT HER A WHILE BUT SHE KEEPS THE BEAUTIFUL MEMORIES WITH SEHUN AND DOESN'T TAINT THEM WITH A BREAKUP THAT COULD BE EVEN NASTIER.
YOUR WRITING STYLE WAS REALLY NICE TO READ AND IT WAS EASY TO RELATE TO YOUR CHARACTERS. THE FLOW WAS NOT TOO FAST NOR TOO SLOW AND THE DESCRIPTIONS WERE REALLY GOOD TOO.
THROUGH FLASHBACKS, WE SEE MORE OF THEIR LOVING RELATIONSHIP AND IMPORTANT TIMES IN IT LIKE WHEN SEHUN CONFESSED OR WHEN HE FIRST KISSED HER. THESE SCENES MAKE A NICE CONTRAST IN THE STORY FROM THE SAD PRESENT TO THE LOVELY AND FLUFFY PAST WHEN THEIR RELATIONSHIP WASN'T BROKEN.
THEN SEHUN REVEALS IN HIS THOUGHTS THAT HE IS AFRAID THAT NARA WILL CHEAT ON HIM IN THE FUTURE AND THAT HE WILL START BEATING HER UP LIKE HIS PARENTS, IT MAKES SENSE IN A WAY THOUGH I PERSONALLY WOULDN'T KNOW WHAT TO DO IN THIS SITUATION.
BUT HIS WAY OF ACTING, WANTING TO BREAK UP BEFORE THAT HAPPENS SHOWS IN ITS OWN WAY THAT HE CARES TOO MUCH ABOUT HER THAT HE DOESN'T WANT TO HURT HER LIKE THIS.
WHEN SHE ASKS SEHUN WHETHER HE STILL LOVES HER OR NOT HE LIES AND NARA BREAKS UP WITH HIM.
HERE IT IS REALLY NICE HOW THEY BREAK UP IN A RATHER NICE WAY WHEN WE SEE THEIR SITUATION BECAUSE NARA ACCEPTS IT THOUGH IT WILL HURT HER A WHILE BUT SHE KEEPS THE BEAUTIFUL MEMORIES WITH SEHUN AND DOESN'T TAINT THEM WITH A BREAKUP THAT COULD BE EVEN NASTIER.
YOUR WRITING STYLE WAS REALLY NICE TO READ AND IT WAS EASY TO RELATE TO YOUR CHARACTERS. THE FLOW WAS NOT TOO FAST NOR TOO SLOW AND THE DESCRIPTIONS WERE REALLY GOOD TOO.
PROPER USE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE (25/25)
PROPER GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION (10/10) - I DIDN'T FIND ANY MAJOR MISTAKES WHILE READING THAT WERE EYE-CATCHING AND DISTURBING.
TERMINOLOGY (5/5) - YOUR VOCABULARY WAS GOOD TOO, THERE WAS NO OVERUSE OF ANY PHRASES OR WORDS.
LANGUAGE BARRIER (10/10) - THERE WAS NO LANGUAGE BARRIER EITHER, NO OVERUSE OF KOREAN OR ANY OTHER LANGUAGE BESIDES ENGLISH.
REVIEWER'S ENJOYMENT (5/5)
OVERALL I REALLY ENJOYED READING YOUR STORY WHICH I HOPE YOU CAN SEE THROUGH THIS REVIEW. THE PLOT WAS GREAT AND YOUR CHARACTERS PRETTY REALISTIC TOO.
IT WAS JUST THE PERFECT MIX OF SAD AND ROMANTIC IN ITS OWN WAY SO REALLY GOOD JOB!
IT WAS JUST THE PERFECT MIX OF SAD AND ROMANTIC IN ITS OWN WAY SO REALLY GOOD JOB!
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