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Author: Emilieee 
Reviewed By: Eunriehyun

Requested Date: 11/14/15
Story Link: Link
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Title: 10/10

Logical: 3/3

Fearless, it is quiet logical and to the point specially since it's connected to the protagonist past,present and future  (?). 
Eye-catching: 3/3
Most of the time one word titles are quiet lacking but with yours...was more to the point. 
Eye-catching: 4/4
It gave the reader the opportunity to decide on what the author is thinking before giving thought of the description or the poster. Note:Pictures tend to tell more than the actual content.

Description/Foreword: 10/10

Summary: 5/5

It was short and to the point. They both have struggle without their parents and each decided on the path they will take.
Appearance: 5/5
The appearance was neat and understandable, quiet outstanding.  

Character Development/Showcasing: 10/10

Development: 5/5

Firstly the girl's development was good and the pace was slow and neat which is important when the story is done in 1st point. Baekhyun, is presented as the careless guy who laughs rather than being seen vulnerable. Yeol is a side character as far as the story is and he is the one who cares more of his friend. 
Relation/Cast: 5/5
Iseul is beginning to come out of her safe house because of Baekhyun and he seemes to be changing even a little because of her. So far, Baekhyun and his friends care for one another -in a very weird way- but they care. And it seemes Baekhyun and his brother are in no good terms. I wonder why...

Behind the Author's Mind: 40/40

Logical: 10/10

So, Fearless is the word Iseul doesn't want to hear do to the consent reminder of her parents death and it reminds us of her fears regarding the issue.  
Original: 10/10
So far so original! I love that you put the thought of writing the meaning of each word you use as the next chapter. I've never seen that before.  
Tone: 5/5
The dialogue was established in a easy way to understand and very well detailed.  

Naration: 5/5

The 1st point of view used was able to explain what she(the protagonist ) wanted to explain and  what you wanted us to know. Well done.
Storyline: 10/10
I honestly like the storyline and it seemes to going in the right track. 

Proper Use of the English Language: 19/25

Proper Grammar/Punctuation: 04/10

So I notice that in several of the chapters some words were misplace, some were put together without a space in between and other words were repeated at least twice. I suggest you use Google drive-word or something like that to help with the corrections.
Termonology: 5/5

 Vocabulary was well extend, the dialogue was good, the paragraphswere organize and each sentence were in order.
Language Barrier: 10/10
No problem. 

General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 5/5
I spend most the time laughing my off when she made the comparison between Baekhyun and the squirrel, so funny! And then when she thought of letting him fall of the stairs because that way she wouldn't have the need to carry him once again. I just love those moments the most. I won't say that the in proper grammar wasn't annoying because it was,but besides that I like the idea of an update and soon. This story is developing it's way into the readers hearts by the beginning of laughter and the ending of heart wrenching regarding the careless guy and the girl with the fearless past that haunts her each day. I would like it to connect going the way it is. Is a very well detailed story worth of  each and everyone who is interested in this type of story. I wish you good luck on your story.^^ 

Total: 94/100