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Reviewed By: Eunriehyun

Requested Date: 10/00/15
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Title: 10/10

 

Your title was very impressive and quiet connected your story. It was well explained.

Description/Foreword: 10/10

 

It description was short and made me curious with only one sentence! It appeared beautifully cordinated and organized.


Character Development/Showcasing: 10/10

 

I love the inner action between the two main characters in both point of view. I never thought it any better. The characters seemed to be real and well connected to the minor characters. 


Behind the Author's Mind: 40/40

 

This story was very well plotted,  had a beautiful storyline. The narrative of the story was enchanting and as a reader I couldn't help but to continue reading to the very heartaching end. T.T 


Proper Use of the English Language: 25/25

 

Your story didn't had any errors as far as I could see. I notice your vocabulary used and it seemed that you thought of it and edit more than a few times before the review. I could see the dedication and commitment.  


General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 5/5
You worked hard for your story and I truly enjoy it to the end. I would've wish they had been together, but at least the couple fie together. Such a touching scene and with the other *cries* Your story was perfect and I'm sorry it took me sooooooooooo long to review it.

 

Total: 100/100

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WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#1
One more thing. I know the Description and the forward are super long. But I planned this story to be like a Novella/Soap Opera.
It may seem like I'm giving away to much in the Description and The Forward, but as you realize you might notice that I haven't.
There are three main parts to this story:
The Past-Childhood
The Past- Orphans/Teens
The Present- The main setting, in which the forward revealed nothing.

I'm an interactive author, meaning I ask questions at the end and leave hints here and there for the readers to try there best at guessing. (They become more invested in my story this way, lol)
WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
#2
-Username : WooGyu_KyuSung_YooSu
-Profile link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/49463

- Story title : Love Me Right
- Story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/976222/love-me-right-mpreg-hunhan-taoris-kaisoo-sulay-chanbaek-chenmin

-Genre : OT12, Angst, Mpreg, Fluff, Comedy, Growth, Friendship, Life, and "LEARNING TO LOVE"

- On-going | To be a long fic.

- Reviewer : KaihleeLo

- So The title of the fic is "Love Me Right", but it has nothing to do with the EXO song; even though some would just assume. The reason why I titled it 'Love Me Right' is because 6 of the main characters suffered in their childhood and eventually were orphaned. They don't know how to let themselves love. In particular, Luhan. As for the other 6 'Love' and 'Lust' are two different things.

- So before you read, I would like to point out, that the pacing of the story and the built up is exactly how I planned. I don't want to rush Romance because you don't 'fall in love' over night, and the characters need to mature. Also, there is a pattern to my chapters "The Past" chapters are essentially flashbacks. "The Present" is taking place now. For every 5 "The Present" chapters, it will be followed by 2 "The Past" chapters; Childhood/Teen years.

- I have a reader who offered to proofread my chapters since I had some typos, and I don't have the time to go back and fix them. "I always update between 12 am - 5 am, so that is the main reason". She is still editing the earlier chapters so please realize I am fixing the errors.


Oh gosh this was a lot. I'm sorry. I'm just really nervous, and I wanted to explain the above before you review.
-Tigress-
#3
Chapter 127: Hey can I have someone send me my review here so I can save it?
This archive is non-selectable so I can't save it myself.