NOTE: One Shot - /Yuri
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(10/10) Title: The title fitted perfectly with the overall story. I found two or three other stories with the exact titles but I won't mark you down for that since I wouldn't have given it any other title. 

(9/10) Character: Since it was one-shot there wasn't any character development so I can't really mark you down for this section. However, I was a little confuse. I love how Jaejoong call Yunho "hyung" in order to lose that feel. But then, Yunho calls Jaejoong "baby" a lot. Personally the term baby can go either way but I thought that was quite interesting. Does the term "baby" not bother Jaejoong? 

(10/10) Originality: The story was angst so it did make me teary! The feels were just right, great job here!

(33/40) Storyline/Plot: Although it was a one shot I couldn't sense a strong plot. I love the storyline overall, it happens when people fall for the wrong person etc. When Jaejoong slept with Yunho and said he was doing so to get rid of the taboo feels, I didn't expect him to die or leave after that. At the same time that was a good twist to it but then again, that sort of stories are quite common. (Nothing wrong with that). I only marked you down for the plot part, for example, how and why did he fall for Yunho? Was it love at first sight? Were they separated since they were children? Did they grow up together? Where are their parents in this? Other family members? There wasn't any background history for us to learn exactly why and how he fell for his brother. It left more questions than answers for me, and in any books I'll love it more when there are more answers. The pace of it wasn't fast nor slow, it was easy to follow!

(21/25) Grammar/Errors: English isn't your first language (I'm aware of that of course since you've requested from me before xD). The grammar wasn't bad, I wasn't near anywhere where I had to re-read another sentence in order to understand it. The bolded sentences was what I deemed necessary since it was showing Jaejoong's thoughts and that was what made the story better. But there's something I wanted to point out, that's when you put two negative terms together, even if you meant for it to be a negative meaning, a negative plus a negative will become a positive. 

Ex: " Yunnie, this is something Joongie couldn't never tell Yunnie. " 

Correction: "Yunnie, this is something Joongie could never tell Yunnie." 

Then there are other errors that can easily be fixed by proofreading. 

(4/5) Overall Enjoyment: I wish I can give you full credits on here but as I already mentioned, I prefer stories with an indepth plot and more answers than questions. I did upvote the story because I want other readers to read it, it's a good read!

(87/100) Points Total

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